Hopeless she kicks
and scream, still hope
burns inside her.
He throws her down to
the ground, she scrambles to
the door, but he catches her
by red hair.
Her clothes tear.
His unending glare.
She stills fight as though
her life was on the line.
She breaks free from his iron
grip grabs a empty wine bottle
and throws it at him.
He grabs her one last time
and does what he set out to
do.
Powerless she screams
but she has absolutely no
strength left.
In the school gym he leaves her
covered in blood.
He gladly awaits their next encounter
Monday in biology, The fear she feels
empowers him.
A student raped on Saturday detention,
but the police don't even hear mention.
Author notes
I was not raped just a poem I wrote.
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Wow, I love the amount of passion you've put into this poem. And I especially appreciate how you can put this much passion into the poem even though you've never gone through this type of experience. That's one of the reasons I love poetry as much as I do; it allows the poet (and then the reader) to become people and to enter worlds that otherwise would not have happened.
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This is an extremely powerful write. There is horror and sadness oozing from each and every line. The ending is such a sad reality... Thanks so much for entering.
DancingRed.
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Thank you so much for your entry in my contest. :-) The contest won't be over for another 8 days, and that's when I'll go through and respond to each of the entries more in depth --- but I've been reading through the poems as I've received them and I've been pleased with what I've seen. Good luck in the contest and have a great day!
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The endline rhyming at the end was a little strange but the write itself was inspirational. We need to tell of what happens... but the courts tend to make it difficult for woman and sometimes it's just more traumatic for a woman to go through it that way. Ah , what a sick truth.
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this was a really sad write..sad how things like this happen..i have been abused and i know the pain that it causes and how it haunts anywho keep writting your very talented
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I liked this poem because it was difficult to read on many levels, and thus a very powerful piece. It makes the reader face this situation and the people involved. However, I have to note a few things: In the first few lines, 'scream' should be 'screams', there should be a comma or some way to separate the thoughts of him grabbing her and her grabbing the wine bottle, the sentence runs together there, 'a empty' should be 'an empty'. I think the line 'monday in biology' rather distracts from the poem because it leads the reader to think: was it a teacher or a student? And even if you were trying to make a point that it was a teacher, a person supposedly to be trusted, I would suggest rephrasing it so that the reader can focus on the conclusion of the poem. Also, the rhyme at the end felt forced because there was no rhyme in the rest of the poem, it feels kind of tossed in there. Thanks for the entry.
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wow this was really sad...even tho this didnt happen to you..its hard and really hard to forget about something like that...no one deserves to go through pain this way..this was a really. great poem
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It was touching I thought it did not go to far I think that people need to know what happens out there and they need to be prepared for whatever might happen there are rapest who get out of prison and could be living right next to you and anyone who does not want to know that is in denial especially if they have children... When my baby girl gets here I am going to do my best to keep her safe and I am so glad that there are people like you out there who are willing to speak up and let others know how cruel the world really can be because there really is people out there who did not know. Growing up I have seen and been through alot of things I did not know were possible and if we keep the word going maybe people will stand up and this child could've told her mom, "I am not comfortable with the way he looks at me" and avoided it all together. Instead of today when cops and parents do not listen so children just do not speak up.
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Ok firstly this isn't about death it's about rape. It's well over the 5 line limit and it is not PG rated so you broke quite a few rules and will not be winning.
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I am sorry
I can understand 5 line limit and not exactly being PG. Which it was not too graphic..., but obviously you have never been raped because after you are raped you are wondering why he didn't just go ahead and kill you. Especially with the police not listening and having to go back and see that man is murder itself. You die a little more everytime he looks or smiles at you everytime he speaks your name you cringe- Rape is death in so many ways and I think you and everyone else who has not ever had something like this happen to you should know this, and you should thank your lucky stars that it has not.
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wow, very very well written. very powerful. thank you for entering this contest.
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wow thats is a really great poem.. i have been melested before it is pretty scary .. i love this poem it speaks out !i think that all men that are like this should burn in hell when i was 10 i told my mom and when we went to the police they didnt care!
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deep dark write
You touched lots of inside feelings, for rape is not simply a thing, a boyish whim, but a dishonorable act against another human being, that disgraces and tear them down to nothing, like dirt. Please think again before such writes. its a horrible crime.
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This is sad, but it's true a lot of times over, and i don't think you took it too far at all, you told the truth.
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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