Have you ever
coiled a noose around your neck
like the moon around the earth
before it strangles its night
so mercilessly
to squeeze out the mystery
of the risen sun?
A contest entry
- have you ever ..... ? by DancingRed.
300 points, ended April 24, 2007, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow..
that's like.. damn intense!!
i like how you end up making this an oroborous of your name. i really like the concept. it's dark, and the suicidal link to this is haunting..
awesome imagery.. well deserved gold!
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I really enjoyed this poem good luck in the contest!
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very pretty
i have to say my favortie word in this peice is 'strangled' it brought a very vivid picture to mind -
this is great. vivid imagery for sure and quite the unique approach to this.
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Impressive write. This poem is very raw and the words are all so perfectly chosen. Great job, keep the ink flowing.
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Unbelievable. The feeling in this is so magical, so raw, so amazing. Each word is perfectly chosen. I love it. Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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Thank you for your kind words.
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