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Noreen

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Noreen

My spiritual guide would make me sleep
Noreen is taking my spirit deep
of days we listen to the rain
while she takes away my pain

Held in her arms under a star
wishing she could take me far
together she would heal my brain
while she takes away my pain

Upon our passions we would ride
and never would she leave my side
holistic woman keeps me sane
while she takes away my pain

My spiritual guide would make me sleep
while she takes away my pain.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet). Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme
for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:

AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.

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  • Ithica silver member
    December 16, 2007

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    If you're done with her I could use a little spiritual healing! Been feelin' a little funky lately... Another great poem, but I've come to expect nothing less...


  • Swan song gold member
    May 13, 2007
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    Very good indeed Is Noreen a friend, spirit or legend?


  • Sacrificial Love
    April 17, 2007

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    I don't know...

    Soulful Woman...
    but reading this makes me want her in my corner

    Beautifully written
    with mastery and expertise

    xo
    Heidi


  • Whoochi gold member
    April 13, 2007

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    Wow....love seeing, exploring new forms...like this and the repetitious use of "while she takes away my pain..." TY for entering and good luck in the contest!


  • rocklover91
    April 10, 2007

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    wow, Amera! Great write! I love it!
    "My spiritual guide would make me sleep
    while she takes away my pain."
    Great lines... really adds to the meaning...

    Love,
    Jenn


  • Spiritvision angel
    April 9, 2007

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    great write my friend. The flow and rhythym is good as well as the imagery of aa being wishing to sleep so the pain would be gone..


  • JohnnyD gold member
    April 9, 2007

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    Amera.

    Now that was quite the beautiful write dear! had very nice flow and texture, yes texture on the page. The picture is appealling to me as I tend towards dark haired beauties, auburn, raven etc. I only have one close female friend who is a natural blonde. interestingly enough you know who is now an auburn and my other friend is a natural redhead. love the light through her hair. anyhow beautiful poem, really nice!



    warmer in FL?

    Dad


  • Desire gold member
    April 9, 2007

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    Magnificent!!

    Love this piece You have penned my Friend!!
    Beautiful form and in honor of a Precious Spirit
    Thank You for sharing this!
    Gorgeous

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
    April 9, 2007
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    Is there another Noreen? I am confused... J/K This is wonderful. I love it. Three bunnies.


  • blueyez
    April 9, 2007
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    Simply beautiful!

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