It had been awhile since our last meeting..
I remember how valiant you thought it was
to let me go for your own fictitious reasons
The drinks were cold, the restaurant hot
You looked just as good as I remembered
You wanted repentance for how you treated me,
feeling asphyxiated during our relationship
You just couldn’t handle it
Seeing that look in your eyes
feelings started to emerge
I knew that what ever you told me to do
at that moment, I would obey
You paid the check and we left
heading straight to my place
I was in total submission
as I had always been
Upon entering the elevator,
it was pure subterfuge
You came up behind me and helped
yourself to my body
It was always your technique,
mortification personified,
just taking what you wanted
Our succulent juices blending
we eagerly fulfilled our desires
Hurtful memories being swept away like dust
You said you will call tomorrow…….
I felt a sense of serenity, another beginning
Author notes
For Lauras Secret Little Corner Group...
I used all the words from the word bank...
Emerges,submission,subterfuge,repentance,serenity,
asphyxiated,fictitious,mortification,dust,succulence,
obey, valiant
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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Wow! very roamntic but risky of getting caught! But did he call again? LOve can be this exciting and more even with the same partner!
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Good stuff.
Authenticity rings.
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Great title for this poem as love has its ups and downs. However love is a strong emotion when its not lust!
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i love the way you have bought the old love back into play in this one...well done on a great write with the word bank given... cheers
Jen
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Beautiful, the way you composed this poem is awesome! WEll done, you really painted an awesome picture!!!!
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Brilliant!
I love this write. You used the extremely dificult word bank, and created a HOT erotic piece with emotions that exploded from the page. Wonderful imagination!
I love the ending....
"Our succulent juices blending
we eagerly fulfilled our desires
Hurtful memories being swept away like dust"
"You said you will call tomorrow…….
I felt a sense of serenity, another beginning"
Great job
Bo
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only you could make an erotic poem out of this word bank...ohhh what goes on in your mind lol you've done an amazing job with this one dear it is utter excellence
laura xxx
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Ehm... yep. Hot write for sure. When trying to see through the images your words put in my head, I wonder about such relations. There seem to be transient temptations triggered off by desires less ephemeral. If it keeps stopping between floors, you will never be able to get out, but at some floor you may find what you are looking for. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
U
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I know someone who will love this...and the TITLE too LMAO!! wow...and Wow...and WOW! The visuals are running pretty heavy at the moment. This is something I could (and have?) see myself doing
OK...I better not say any more on the grounds that I might incriminate myself...
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This is just awesome. Tells such a great story. What I have written so far for this is nothing compared to this.. Just wow.
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Very erotic, but romantic at the same time...love that can't wait, is always the best...you did well with the picture you gave with your words..along with the graphics..love it, thanks for sharing
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Wow, quite a hot and steamy write here.
Great work with the word bank.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck
to you with it in the contest!
Jeremy0826
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Yummy. Three bunnies!
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