Last night I
debated whether it was worth it or not--
to crawl on skinned knees
and bruised forearms
to the edge of the carpet where a voice pleaded
through a wire
for me to pick up, baby please.
and last night I told someone
whom I had known
and loved
that I didn't care-
for them,
for anyone
---anymore.
so I could be left,
alone
where most hang their clothes,
yet he hung my hope.
and I just wanted to curl up in the spot
where my dignity first deserted me,
where my life should've stopped
--- before you made it want to.
I loved the place I've hated and
I missed someone who wasn't you,
certainly wasn't mine.
Today I realized
what had been suspended for so long
was bound to crash down sometime
on me
who naively danced
underneath.
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Author notes
carcrashhumor.
[this had been swimming in my head.... hope you have fun judging honeycakes]
"most hang....he hung my hope" = what happened in the closet.
everything kinda went even more downhill from then.
In a list
A contest entry
- Best of the Best by She Stole My Voice.
500 points, ended May 31, 2007, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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im sorry darling, although I do wonder what happened in the closet.
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this is never easy--no it isn't indeed. haha, starting tomorrow crash, I'll start printing your poems and keep them in a binder, your stuff is addictive and uniquely beautiful to the point where I feel you should publish it, so I'll print out your stuff starting tomorrow.
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aww wow baby, You flatter me so very much!
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its only cause I love you so much!! ^_^
and yeah, you should write something cause I miss your writing and it gets me through my very stressful days and life hasn't exactly been golden for me as of late but your poems help me smile so yay! =]
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I loved the place I've hated and
I missed someone who wasn't you,
certainly wasn't mine.
loved that.
absolute brilliance.
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xxx how've you been?
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"yet he hung my hope"
--this idea is quite sad, for sure. Some people can take everything out of you, that's for sure. I have been to the point where I've wanted to tell everyone in my life who loved me that I didn't care but I never actually said it. It's a pretty ... daring move. I'd of been stupid to actually say it so I am glad I didn't. Here I am rambling on. Pfft. The ending is really nicely put together, I am always surprised for some reason to see how well you wrap it up ... I don't know why. Hello, it's you.
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aww thank you babbbbbbe!
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the word "judging" almost makes me throw up in my mouth
how ridiculous is that
anyways
I like raw emotion
and the way you made a normal thing ..no.wait..rephrase..a poem that most would write and I wouldnt like..you made it into something that I would read...like..and want to congratulate you for..so..congratulations on catching my eye...or something like that I guess..
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haha, well I hope I didn't make you throw up too much...
Thanks a lot for the comment =]
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I loved it. Absolutely incredible. I love the first part:
last night I told someone
whom I had known
and loved
that I didn't care-
for them,
for anyone
---anymore.
I loved the place I've hated and
I missed someone who wasn't you,
certainly wasn't mine.
I Love your work. Good Job.
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thanks
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Last night I
debated whether it was worth it or not--
to crawl on skinned knees
and bruised forearms
to the edge of the carpet where a voice pleaded
through a wire
for me to pick up, baby please.
and last night I told someone
whom I had known
and loved
that I didn't care-
for them,
for anyone
---anymore.
babyface this part made me sad
your poetry is wonderful
keep it up! =]
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thanks muchossss
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very fragile.
We've all been here.
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This was fuckin amazing honey.
Last night I
debated whether it was worth it or not--
to crawl on skinned knees
and bruised forearms
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and I just wanted to curl up in the spot
where my dignity first deserted me,
where my life should've stopped
--- before you made it want to.
I loved the place I've hated and
I missed someone who wasn't you,
certainly wasn't mine.
Today I realized
what had been suspended for so long
goddam
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love you kat!!
xx ♥
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This piece is so beautiful, it almost made me cry.
"Last night I
debated whether it was worth it or not--
to crawl on skinned knees
and bruised forearms"
was one of my favorite stanzas baby.
Love you ♥
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thanks bb!
♥
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