Easter is so grand
Mine was all fine and dandy
But also quiet boring
Author notes
wise-child12, Haiku
A contest entry
- The Profound Rounds Part V (Invite only) by Kevan.
345 points, ended April 14, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Like Lil emo boy has mentioned in his comment, you are one syllable over the haiku ruling, however, if there was one syllable less in another line, that wouldn't have matter.. Some really amazing haikus even have one syllable more, or even a few less.
Another thing I would like to mention is you have a typo in your final line. You currently have "quiet," which pertains to sound. The word you were looking for is "quite," just as a little side note.
Other than the above, I thought this was a great little haiku. I tend to believe, that unless you're overly religious, all Easter's are great, but boring like you mentioned. -
Aaaahhh am sorry it was boring. I did not want to even go to the sister in laws house. I was up way to late the night before. Thats ok did you get candy though?
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Form 8/10
Imagery 4/5
Title 4/5
Rules 5/5
Overall Satisfaction 8/10
Total 29/35
Good work. One error... last line has one syllable too many, but it's alright. I'm glad you had a good Easter
I hope my gift to you is for me to move you onto the next round, lol. Good luck!
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