If we could only speed up time;
Fast-forward this dreaded life.
Forgetting about the past;
And living in the future.
Everything I've worked so hard for
Has suffocated me in regrets
What can I do to make this right?
With the slight push of a button..
The same thoughts; replaying in my head.
Oh how I wish they would erase.
I've made it this far, but who's to know.
How much more can I take?
As each day passes by, my heart slowly shrinks.
A part of me diminishes as I think of you.
The thought that you're gone sinks in;
More and more as time passes.
My lip starts to tremble..
My eyes glaze over..
My body starts to shake..
A tear falls..
My heart.. breaks.
A contest entry
- Anything Contest by PrettyxoxPoison.
300 points, ended April 10, 2007, 43 entries
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this was a great poem and I can't tell you how much I love the ending of you poem it finished it nicely. thanks for entering
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The thing about going into the future and forgetting the past is that you dont want to forget the past, because its what the past lessons hold that you want to remember, soon in time you will come to realize that all teh things you regret, youll no longer regret. Things will always stick in your head, that unfortanetly is the pain that this poem expresses. I hope in time your beautiful heart is restored back to its gentle elegance and you warm us all with your smile. I never want to see your heart broken cause that breaks my heart. and i love you too much to let that happen.
Amanda this poem clearly describes more then any other poem the pain you have bottled in your heart. and the verses fit together to give you the story of your last relationship and its a sorrow filled story that will bring tears to peoples hearts. A poem that can truly touch the readers hearts is the best poem to have despite anything ive said before. Your poem makes a connection with the reader and shows us that relationships are painful when they end. we can all only hope and pray that in time your heart will no longer be in this much pain and you will soon grace us all with your old happy self once again.
I love you dearly Amanda.
Jessikah -
I like the last stanza a lot. I'm not quite sure what you're truly writing about but I know that I have felt the same way about areas in my life. Nicely done.
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This is exactly how I feel everyday that I see my ex-fiance with his new girlfriend. I have to see them everyday and my best friend forces me to smile and laugh at their jokes. It hurts so much but I promised myself that 'she' would never see me cry. Thanks for entering, great write.
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Welcome to Allpoetry
This is really amazing. I cannot believe it is your first poem here on this site. Well done! Please do not hesitate to ask if you need anything at all
Melanie
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Whoa!!! this is really really GOOD! I LOVE THIS! good luck and thanks for entering my contest!!!!!!! -
Holy Man, That was an awesome poem...... I think that you could be a poet =P
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Muchas Excellenta
YAY I LOVE IT
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