Her heart is beating quickly
Mother earth is alive
Sleeping in quiet contentment
Years will pass
Her heart grows dreary
The earth is getting gray
Mother earth is slowly dieing
Her beating soul is a beat every four
She's beginning to cry
We can save her
Make her heart beat on sixteenths
Let her once more sleep with contentment
Back to the start is where we'll fly
When mother earth was happy
When we were invisible
Author notes
wise-child12
A contest entry
- Elements -- Round 3 by Ryno.
300 points, ended April 14, 2007, 2 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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grammar error--
Dieing >> dying??
This write has a wonderful message, and is uniquely worded. A lot behind it … though I feel you could be an excellent profound writer someday if you keep improving. Another continued write of well done-ness (if that’s a word) thanks for sharing & best wishes.
~Ryan~ -
hummmmm a thoughtful write. It makes you think. What a creavite way of looking at things. This is a great write. Very well done.
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