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A Mere Reflection Of What Once Was

My heart has been torn
from the pain you inflicted.

Tears of blood flow and
I cannot breathe from this torment
you brought upon me.

I writhe in agony,
awaiting death to overtake my soul.

You cut me off from your essence
and I bleed...

an old and withered
reflection of what I once was...

Author notes

'My Immortal Soul Lives Forever'

OPTION 2 - WORDBANK
WORDS USED IN ORDER - HEART, TORN, PAIN, BLOOD, BREATHE, BROUGHT, WRITHE, DEATH, CUT, BLEED, OLD, WITHERED.

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  • Darkened Seraph
    April 14, 2007

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    thats dark. you can feel the emotion that this poem has in it clearly, you have used all the words in the wordbank to a real effect well done, good luck in the contest

    • Darkened Seraph
      April 14, 2007
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      Please ensure your read the full rules I dont want to DQ this, your only getting this warning because you followed most the rules i stated


  • sans-amour
    April 8, 2007

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    Nicely done, dear poetess... best of luck in the contest to come


  • you make me smile
    April 8, 2007

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    Brilliant :)

    A good use of the words given, very well written. I can feel the pain written in the words and can somewhat relate to the torture of the heart/soul. Goodluck in the contest