Never imagined this can be true
Never wanted to get over you
It is just a feeling I'm grieving
On past days I was very craving
Seems like your love is my twilight
I've lingered waiting for a sun light
I forgot all and my heart has perished
Given much before, my love has finished
All I've done wasn't good enough
Yet, I never wished you be so tough
So fake was your feigned desire
Still it was burning my fire
I do regret it not right now
I've been in this, don't know how
And all the feelings I do defy
No reason, I just seem to deny
Surrendering to coldness, no more emotions
Nor feelings, it's just a hate promotion
Author notes
"I Like to bite."
I got over my ex & this is how I feel now..
It was inspired by Hoobastank--Good Enough...
A contest entry
- PREWRITES ONLY by wingsofgold25.
500 points, ended September 28, 2007, 117 entries
Honorable mention
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Poet
Sadly itseems many confuse love & lust & all to often one partner is in it for only the lust. So illusive, this true love thing. & Ty for your kind comment on my poem.
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The opposites attract also applies that opposites repel and sometimes they get in the way... you can love someone and ultimately hate them at the same time and then it makes your day to day life hard and you act out both emotions. I know that feeling ALL too well, I'm afraid to say.
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"You got over your ex and this is how you feel?"
Well this is a very powerful piece here Miss
"Seems like your love is my twilight
I've lingered waiting for a sun light"
This part is extremely beautiful...I think a more positive beautiful piece could be written, inspired by these two lines alone
Keep expressing yourself
Keep feeling
Keep believing
And....
Keep them comin!
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Very emotional piece. I think its relatable to many people as well. I to can relate to some of the feelings expressed in this piece. I think all of us have been there, our hearts broken so many times. Yet there will always be more to break it.
Overall the poem flowed pretty well. I also think the title fit this piece very well. THanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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really glad u got over ur ex. great job expressing ur feelings. I really liked this part:
"Never imagined this can be true
Never wanted to get over you" it totally stole my attention.
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This is a very well written piece A lot of anger Pain, and emotional feelings. Still a very good write.
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You are young I am guessing with out checking. only the young have the ability to expose the pain they have with how could you I trusted you with so much innocence and sweetness.
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I'm 22...Thnx alot for your comment
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Excellent Title
So sad I felt and angry too. The title is perfect for this poem and the first line never imagined this to be true then the last line nor feelinggs, it's just a hate promotion. Perfect all of it compliments the poem as a whole. Thank you for sharing your gift with me to write poetry. stavykm
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I can relate to some of these feelings. Glad you got over your ex. Thanks for entering.
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Wow, this is good. Doesn't breaking up leave one so
poetically solvent? I loved this. lol
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Yeah, thnx for comment
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i relaly must listen to this song, i dont know it personally
i like this though good luck
timpet -
hi im SO sorry everyone who entered my contest my laptop totally died and then i went on holiday and im so sorry and i know its a serious responsibility and i am truly sorry. but i will judge them now i just wanted to comment and tell you all that
thank you
patteringraindrops
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Getting over ex's sucks. It hurts. A lot.
I found it kind of hard to understand and follow the poem, it felt very choppy to me. But that may just be me. Overall, good write. ^-^
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the end didn't end with much power and emotion as the top portion , it ende ith more. great job. thnks entering .
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I read this before, but it still packs the emotional puch of the first time. Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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it says i havent commented maybe this will fix it
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Whew
a mouthful said here.. getting over ex's are hard to do sometimes.. especially if everything was going just right..then life comes in and changes everything..
Yvonne
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This is indeed very emotional. You have expressed what you feel very effectively. Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
Jeannie
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very good a little typo that needs to be fixed (Seemed like your love is my twilight..needs to be seems like)
good work
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I edited it..Thanks for your comment..
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