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Sailor

Sailor came, played a game, played a silly little game
Time to kill, time to fill, time to sit and contemplate
How he'd like be around all the people in this town with their fancy cars and things
But hes got time

Momma came, found some blame, placed some silly little blame,
Time to kill, time to fill, time to sit and aggravate
All the people in the town as they sit and watch her drown in her fancy cars and things
But shes got time

Brother came, found a name, found a silly little name
Time to kill, time to fill, time to sit and watch her play
In the town where people laugh on the others behalf by their fancy cars and things
But hes got time

Sister came, found a flame, found a silly flame,
Time to kill, time to fill, time to sit and watch him fade
As the people in the town watch that boy get around with his fancy cars and things
But shes got time

Then I came, it's the same, its the silly little same
Time to kill, time to fill, time to sit and watch them fail
All the people in this town, all they do is sit around with their fancy cars and things
But I, I've got no time

Paraniod, hear the noise, hear the whisper, watch the door
I've got no time

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  • Ms. morrow
    December 1, 2007

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    VERY UNIQUE

    This was incredibly lyrical. The repetitional sound of the first lines of each stanza was wonderful. I'm a little lost with the sailor connection to the title, but I liked it nonetheless! Ms. Morrow


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    April 8, 2007

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    Wow, girl, where did this one come from? Pretty complicated and clever. Is this the same 12 year old I first met. Don't think so at all - she's growing up. Good job, Claire. Kind of like a song here.

    Paul