It began with kindling against winter's fury
the felling of trees to keep humans warm;
the sign of protection evoking awe
as it shone in the southern night,
its brilliance radiating power.
Who then brought it down to earth
banishing its brightness,
fashioning its hard strength
creating an aura of fear and death?
It became Rome's shadow across the lands
hardening into terror
outstretched arms and pinnioned feet;
a holy trepidation, but no refuge
against the streaming flight
of thousands of human torches
bordering the emperors' roads.
Now an icon of death
its shadow embraces human hearts
transformed anew by hands
crossing breast and forehead;
omen of sorrow and consolation.
A contest entry
- Free Verse...But by masterblaster.
390 points, ended April 15, 2007, 28 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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. . .but for the truth penned here,
the world would be a better place. Our shame as Christians is not original sin, but the sins and deaths perpetrated over centuries, in His name.
This is most thought provoking and well written. I am bookmarking this to come back and read a multitude of times.
Thank you for sharing this
Buddy
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exelent
this poem is noithing short of exelent! its well worth the award, and it is penned beautifuly. death is hard. i have recently had to deal with the death of my uncle and you put the point across beautifuly. i can relat to this write exeptionaly well. well done on this poem and again well worth the award!
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this is so very deep
didnt see he picture that inspired this poem
but you did a wonderful job on this i would applaud but i have no points left
so a million clappies to you
great work
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Wow
Congratulations on your award. This piece is exceptionally powerful and filled with light. I am so pleased I have stopped to read this today and that I have been able to absorb the impression left. Wonderful piece. Congratulations on a truly deserving award. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Pamela A Lamppa
Good to meet you, Pamela, and thank you for your encouraging comments. I'm really glad that you like this one. Joy
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Hi, an excellent write, and so true, the next comp I run will be a max of 20 entries,lol, all the best in the comp a lovely poem, hugs Di
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This is very deep and thought provoking stuff, I love your word choices and the descriptions used to give the piece its power. I'll have to read it a few times to fully digest it. The flow is spot on! Love you always Grams. Laura
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Laura Lamarca
Hi, granddaughter mine and thank you for your understanding comments. They are much appreciated, as I think you know.
blessings and love, Grams.
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Very deep and painful remembrance of life and the struggle to keep the life fire burning
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stories untold
Thank you for your understanding comments. They are most welcome.
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This is truly a journey or imagary and thought. I love the flow of the poem which really helps the reader drift away as the get lost in the elegant you so carefully chosen.
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Street Alchemy
Thank you for your friendly comments which I enjolyed reading. Did you by any chance look at the picture on the contest page? Surely it's a contest which you could enter and probably win a trophy.
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This indeed gets the mind visions flowing. Great job on this penning dear poet. Best wishes to you on a job well done.
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vsutton
Hi. I could have sworn I'd replied to your welcome comments. It must have got lost in the vagaries of the site. However I do appreciate your reading this one and your thoughts about it.
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