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Lonely

I drove down the old coast road
Just to get away
From all those people that mean well
But just don’t know what to say
You know I’ll always love you
If you’re here or far away
I just need you beside me
Every minute, everyday

You’re everything to me
You’re my life, my love, my soul
I will forever love you
It is you that makes me whole
For you I’ll do anything
But I just can’t let you go
I’ll cling to you forever
My love will only grow

I walked along the shoreline
Barefoot in the sand
Remembering all the times
We walked there hand in hand
It just seemed so empty
No it just did not feel right
I need you here beside me
I just want you here tonight

You’re everything to me
You’re my life, my love, my soul
I will forever love you
It is you that makes me whole
For you I’ll do anything
But I just can’t let you go
I’ll cling to you forever
My love will only grow

I can’t believe you left me
No I can’t believe you’re gone
It hurts you left me all alone
That’s the reason for this song
My God I just don’t understand
It should have been me instead
It’s you that should be living
And me that should be dead

You’re everything to me
You’re my life, my love, my soul
I will forever love you
It is you that makes me whole
For you I’ll do anything
And there is one thing that I know
Once again we’ll be together
When it comes my time to go


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  • JustFallingApart
    July 18
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    My god, if I didn'y know any better I would have thought you were....nevermind, it's impossible, forgive me. This is an outstanding poem. There is such emotion in this that it's radiating of the screen. I love this, it's beautiful. You have such a unique talent and it's absolutely wonderful you are sharing it with the world. Thank you, very much, for entering my contest. hope all is well


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry in the contest. An interesting poem with great imagery although a little repetitive and we felt that maybe it was entered in too many contests.

    All the best in the judging

    Sue and Jeff


  • Lotus-Mama
    July 3, 2008
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    This is beautiful! What a gift you have!


  • walkinthereign
    June 27, 2008
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    This poem must mean a lot to you because you have entered it into so many contests. It has a great beat but I found it a little repetitive. The emotions are there though and can feel your pain. I also like the imagery of you walking on the sand barefoot. Good Job!


  • XkatsuneX
    June 16, 2008
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    that last line is a ringer.


  • GypsyEyes
    June 2, 2008

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    you have written something very good! i like the first stanza! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox

  • Honeydew
    May 19, 2008

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    beautiful

    a beautiful write...nice flow..warm loving caring words devoted to the loss of a loved one..great write...thank you for entering.


  • daviscth silver member
    March 5, 2008
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    Awesome imagery in this.


  • Demmy-Defect
    January 11, 2008

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    this was so cute! i serisouly loved this; you have a very good sense of rythm here, and a poem you should be proud of!


  • Anguas-Confusion gold member
    January 8, 2008

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    Such a good penning, so many raw emotions. This shows how losing someone really can devastate a part of you that you never really realised existed... it goes with the saying "you never know what you've got until it's gone" a very well penned lyrical poem. Thank you so so much for adding it to my contest and I am so sorry for your loss. The very best of luck to you. xXx

  • GypsyEyes
    November 26, 2007
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    Judge Says

    This brought tears to my eyes! I loved you emotion and the flow. I also love the repeated stanza. This is what I was looking for in this contest. Thank you and good luck.
    ~Dommi


  • esroddo silver member
    September 21, 2007

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    Beautiful write well written, well enjoyed thanksfor entering LISA


  • reckless abandon
    July 23, 2007

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    Amazing! I love this a lot. This is well written and the rhythm and rhyme are great. Thanks for entering and good luck!

  • wendymolly
    June 23, 2007
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    i lovit! u r a finalist!

  • meredith spitz
    April 8, 2007
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    This is the one!!!

    I think you should enter this one in the contest. Especially if it's a love contest. If you'd rather pick another song/lyrics that's fine, but this is my favorite.

  • meredith spitz
    April 7, 2007

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    Wow, I really like this song. It is written with memories of sad pasts and it's beautiful. Keep writing because I want to hear more.


    • BillyClyde
      April 7, 2007
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      Thank you

      I will write as long as the inspiration to is there-thanks for providing more!

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