The feel of your lips as they graze mine,
Can only hurt knowing you will leave me behind.
Your fingers as they brush across my skin,
Makes my love feel wasted again.
The words you whisper softly in my ear,
I have to pretend that I don't want to hear.
You promise that time can't change your heart,
Yet it is slowly tearing us apart.
You swear you will never love me any less than now,
As September grows closer I just don't see how.
As I feel your bare skin touch mine,
My only fear is the small remainder of time.
For you the only man I will ever love this way,
My heart breaks more with the passing of each day.
Knowing you must leave in five months time,
Makes me hate the fact that you are mine.
I shiver as you pull me closer to you,
Without you by my side I just don't know what to do.
I promise I won't ever find another,
As we hold on to each other.
The words you whisper softly in my ear,
I need to not want to hear.
We promise nothing can change how we feel,
One last kiss, the final seal.
A contest entry
- † What You Can't Get Back † by Cupcake Craziness.
800 points, ended April 21, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i would have liked to have more of the narrative told without the "you" and "your" and "i". in writing poetry describing how love hurts, i often see those words used. when someone reads a poem, one can guarantee that it is from "i" point of view. (lol- weird english?) the "i" and you and your breaks the poem and makes it sound like angst in the context of love, hate, or angry poems. love, hate, and angry poems aren't angst if the poem is written in an objective point of view. good feelings and good universal appeal.
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When I read another's poem, I am never sure if I am reading someone's true feelings or oe made for a contest. I may have addressed some thoughts n feelinsw in one of my poems. http://allpoetry.com/poem/2819190
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