Pulling you out of the washer
Slamming the dryer
Having to wear you all day long
Red
With that hideous mouse
Depressing
But elating
At the same time
Awesome people
Dismal place
Filled to the brim with screaming
Children
Begging to be shamed
And almost every single one
Needing a serious
Time
OUT
Weaving through crowds
Serving up pizzas
Cleaning off tables
The birthday party dance
Makes me weak in the knees
I hate
Public
Exposure
Making announcements
"If you're here with..."
Who's party?
The names all blend together
Samantha, Jen, Trent, Josephine
How many plates did they say they needed?
I'm so
CONFUSED
Red blurs everywhere
All working together
To achieve the common
Goal
Of a quick ten o'clock close
That blood colored shirt
Laying crumpled on the floor
Every
Night
Taunting me with the fact
I have to go right back
Tomorrow...
Author notes
My shirt for work is bright red...sometimes it just makes me cringe.
"I read the rules!!!"
A contest entry
- *~-* The Passion of Red *-~* by Dragonsblood.
450 points, ended April 18, 2007, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well I suppose if it had black stripe running across it's centre you could always turn up at an AFL game in Australia and claim to be an Essendon supporter ;-)
I've worn worse!
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lovely write, certainly deserved the position it got, well done!
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A very beautiful poem. Love the narration and the form.
My favorite lines:
That blood colored shirt
Laying crumpled on the floor
Every
Night
Taunting me with the fact
I have to go right back
Tomorrow...
You were able to transpire your thoughts in these words well as you ended the poem.
Nicely done.
Thanks for sharing and see you around.
~VIRGOAN~ -
You really captured the frenzied and frenetic pace of someone who is 'seeing red' all day long. I really like our original and refreshing poetic style. Congratulations on winning the coveted silver goblet!
All the best,
David Michaels
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lmao!!
OMGosh this is awsome. I never have read such a heartfilled poem about WORK! Oh I need to make a contest now about work oh you have inspired me so much! Great job. really I love this piece for all its worth.
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wow...i loved the way that you put an image to red through where you work. pretty cool! this flowed very nicely, i enjoyed reading it!
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nice... red huh? I guess if you have to wear a same color shirt all the time you kind of get tired of it... well... I wear plain black shirts all the time (my wardrobe is full of them) and I really haven't got tired of them... I guess I just got used to them... but I guess it is a diferent deal when you have to wear for work and its not your decision... so yeah... I feel your pain there... I like the description of the work environment... I wouldn't really now... but I guess you have your experiences. huh? but anyways I can tottaly picture the whole work environment you were talking about so you did a good job describing stuff... so good job.
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