The international enterprise
Soon becomes divided
Most precious flowers
Waste away on green land
Warnings galore on to be
No one takes heed
Therefore to be turns to
Now what IS
Sadly repetition takes place
Earth cries from neglect
No one mothers the seed
Enriched Transformation needed
Author notes
This is about Global Warming
In a list
A contest entry
- Global Warming? Voice it here. by Icedflamez112.
450 points, ended May 1, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The way you represent Earth's turmoil
Almost like a child with a scraped knee- that every adult walking by ignores.
Except it is more like this child is suffering from lukemia.
Loved it, this is awesome -
Nice. Short, sweet, and to the point. good luck to you in the contest.
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Great piece. And very true! I really love how it's very to the point and powerful.. but short. Good luck in the contest and thanx for entering .
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Nicely said...and so true are your words...global warming certainly is not a problem of the future; it's here, and now. Well done! Thanks for sharing!
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God gave you a voice and you certainly aren't afraid to use it for the greater good. lift up your voice and praise in him...thank you for sharing. keep up the good fight. peace and light always in all ways, kp
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Explained well. This is a deep and meaningful way of expressing what the earth I am sure is feeling and even thinking in the hand of humans. The idea of what is happing make us scared of whats to come. Know that the earth is forever changing and the would has changed before and before that, we might be bring on this a little faster but life and the earth will find a ballance at one ponit. Who knows what kind of price we will pay for rushing the mother. Well done, I could not find a thing bad to say about this poem.
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very nicley done poem. I really like it a great deal. You did a good job with this piece. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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This is a very strong and powerful message that you radiate within those lines hunny, and I applaud you for that
I had a good laugh with the comments that are only accessable for staff here
isn't it annoying when people try to force up their opinion 
lol
Very well written beautiful one
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This is well done and you met the challenge. Your flow is fluid and runs off the lips easily. The image is vivid and powerful depicting man’s apathy and the gradual determination of the earth. Well done!
Love,
Amera
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It is easy to see that you are as perturbed with the people of Earth as Mother Nature. She is fed up with the disrespect and neglect and is retaliating as we speak. We had three feet of snow dumped on us in the past three days. Blizzard conditions that followed a week of 70 degree temperature with blue skies and sunshine. It seems like the snow will never stop. The Earth has shifted, and the warming is mixing the seasons. Here in Cleveland we are prone to have all the seasons in one week. Even the plants and animals are confused. Let us hope that people do take heed. Sorry for rambling but your words invoked much thought. Excellent! I wish you well in this challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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wonderful poem ! good luck to you in the contest ...xxx cheeky xxx
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Hello, Kari. Saw you on the forum boards, and thought I'd read your poems... and comment, too.
Gaea does battle. Global warming is real, I believe, but is not fully understood; it is only partly by me anyway.
What "Pops" in your poem, as I see it, is the capitalization of the words, "Enriched Transformation". ET phone home perchance?
Eh, this may be me reading into it (this poem) too much.
I like the time warp within this poem. The notion of what was, is. It's powerful.
Thanks for an enjoyable read. ~Clay.
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A very well expressed view of whats happening to the world around us, as we sit by and watch.. I really like these lines...
"Therefore to be turns to
Now what IS
Sadly repetition takes place
Earth cries from neglect
No one mothers the seed"
this poem makes you sad, and hopefully opens some eyes on what's happening... nicely penned, well done!!
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Wonderful job! So heartbreaking and so true. Good luck!
Blessed be.
Lizzy
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You're so right it hurts! Let's not talk about it,lets do something. The time to of instilled changes was like yesterday. Find ways to green your own life back in a hurry. We've lost most control already. Excellent heads up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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okay... I somehow lost a complete critique.... weird....let's try again
Nice poem... with an important message. I stumbled a bit on the 'to be' in both spots, because I couldn't figure out what it was referring to... until I read the poem again, and it bacame clear. I like the last line in this, and it speaks volumes.
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