Blood red rose petals
are on your lips,
and summers dew
is in your kiss,
Feather soft
the touch
of your fingers,
and in autumn leaves
your face lingers
My day you light
brushing the clouds away,
and when
the stars glimmer
at the end of the day
When your thoughts
steal softly
through the night,
to come and hold me
so close, so tight,
I can feel
your silent shadow
guiding me
towards tomorrow
A contest entry
- Love is... by Dusty.
513 points, ended April 27, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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Absolutely stunningly beautiful...I love the flow of words....A very enjoyable poem to read and re-read over again and be just as effective as the first time reading it...thanks for sharing
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well done. Congratulations on the bronze. It was well deserved. -
This is so lovely
I know in so many ways we do touch each others life with love and hope .And we tend to come back to those who shows this love in all they do and say .Very good work here
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this is really good you can just picture people together
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Hi Paul,
I will edit this for I understand what you mean about the layout. Thankyou for the kind words. Best wishes Rose x
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I like the overall theme of this but it would benefit greatly by more attention to the capitalization. Also if it was separated a bit into distinct thoughts, verses it would flow better.
Thank you for entering.
Paul -
This is beautiful, I love what you have expressed Well done and thanks for entering x
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Beautiful write!
Well deserving of a trophy...
I will have to read more from you...
Write on!
*PEACE*
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Congratulations on getting bronze; this is a most deserving piece.
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Excellent
Very well done. So deserving of the bronze. -
Congrats on the Bronze!
This is beautiful. I love the wording and images that you have depicted.
'when your thoughts
steal softly
through the night
to come and hold me
so close so tight
I can feel your
silent shadow
guiding me
towards tomorrow.'
That is my favorite part.
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I have had the same problems before! I tend to have to go back into edit and restructure it, sometimes putting two spaces between each line to get it to lay correctly, have no idea why that happens!
This was a beautiful penning regardless of structure! I see why you pulled a shiney! Excellent work, keep it up, this was certainly my pleasure to read
~Tia
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Excellent
So very well done. And truly deserving of the bronze. Congratulations.
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Dear Dusty
I just want to say thankyou so very much for my trophy and your very kind comments . I am very sorry that I wasn't able to reply to you earlier, but I was having problems posting replies till very recently. I am pleased that you enjoyed my poem. I really enjoyed your contest. Thanks again. All Best Wishes rose-quartz xx -
Very beautiful.
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I love this poem it is short and wonderful
keep it up
I think its good with the punctuation it has now besides who made up rules for poetry anyway.
I love the "so close so tight" line because it seems no matter how close im being hugged it does never feel close enough.
El
x x x
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