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Parchment and pixels

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There's something

about broken mirrors;

they still swallow what's in sight

and let multiplied reflections

dance upon their skin.

 

     They dictate the endlessness

     of energetic echoes.

 

While the moon mumbles

lamentations to winds,

rhythms of rupture

recite within the words.

 

It's like a dull grumble

of fragmentizing glass,

forking frozen colors

of parchment

    and pixels.

 

     Scents of solitude

     tinge iridescent ink,

     then ostracize luminous liaisons.

 

The house of union

unravels upon my eyes -

 

then births into

a pale slick of oil.

 

     (as torn pictures mirror the end)

 

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  • chained-death
    May 23, 2009
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    Great response towards the picture, I enjoy reading it.


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    BANDITS UNITED!

    My apologies for A late spotlight

    What can I say? ...This is just a lovely piece of artistry, not only in words but in the images you beautifully bring forth, they are very affective...

    Good use of aliteration and metaphor, making this poem so engaging to read

    All the best ~Lilac


  • walkingstick98
    January 16, 2008

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    BANDITS UNITED

    this is a very very well written poem. You have a wonderful talent for writting. These words are so well put together. Great job.


  • Tamera
    January 15, 2008
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    Bandits United

    I like the images you create with very unique phrasing, you experiment with your creativity and it is not "the ususal". I like it. Tamera


  • heygoo
    January 15, 2008

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    Bandits United !

    This is a wonderful poem here. Filled with richness and luxury and also harsh jagged edges. I really like the alliteration and the line about the moon mumbling is just great. Nice job here.


  • debilynn
    January 15, 2008

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    BANDITS UNITED!!!!

    you really paint the pictures with your words~ great imagery. thank you for sharing this. keep writing friend. God bless you always


  • Shamanicmusings
    January 15, 2008

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    Bandits United !

    Broken mirrors, lucks destroying angel and don't I know it!
    Lovely images brought to mind and the consequences?


  • PhoenixFaith Greeters member
    January 15, 2008

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    Bandits United

    This is a wonderful piece and I really like your form that you have written in. The picture that you have with this poem fits so well and i love the last part of this piece. wonderful job keep it up.

    never give up
    Always write from the heart
    Kate


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    January 15, 2008

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    BANDITS UNITED!

    I might be pulling this from thin air, but the tone of the piece sounds so regretful to me. The image I get is of an individual pouring over photographs and letters, thinking over and over again, "If only . . ." You have some wonderful imagery throughout. Enjoy your day in the spotlight!


  • Twinstar gold member
    January 15, 2008

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    Bandits United!!!

    Very well done, nice flow and tone and wonderful alliteration as everyone before me has said. Great job on this piece!

    Love & Light
    Debbera


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    January 15, 2008

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    BANDITS UNITED !

    This in an engrossing journey with feather lightness. Your descriptive imagery is powerful, what a lovely word picture you paint! Well Done!

    You have been Spotlighted by your Bandit Sisters & Brothers today because WE CARE!

    Bandits Rock!

    Dennis


  • Lady Altheia
    January 15, 2008
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    Bandits United.

    I like all the descriptions and alliterisms. I am not sure I follow the poem though.

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    January 15, 2008
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    Bandits United!
    Good use of alliteration here within this beautifully written piece.


  • MerelyMadness
    January 15, 2008

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    Bandits United!

    The amount of alliteration here is amazing. It really emphasizes the theme of reflections and mirrors and such. Wonderful write!


  • Polaja Greeters member
    January 15, 2008

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    Bandits United!

    This is an outstandingly beautiful poem... I really love the alliteration, it goes well with the image of broken reflections... the layout is wonderfully suited to the poem... amazing!

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • paperparadox silver member
    January 15, 2008

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    Bandits United!

    I like the images (forgive the pun ) in this piece, and I also very much like the interspersed alliteration. I'm into alliteration at present and love the challenge of the melding and blending of words.

    Very nice results here. Well done!


  • ronnica
    January 15, 2008

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    BANDITS UNITED
    I was always afraid of broken glass and I have never had much of it around me, I like the hint of reflections coming through.


  • Melodies
    January 15, 2008

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    BANDITS UNITED... SURPRISE!

    Poetry about mirrors is a sure way to give the reader a glimpse of mysterious images, and you have done that so well in this fine poem! YAY!

    Fine writing!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    January 12, 2008

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    The title is pertinent to and part and parcel of the poem, I liked that. For me, the first stanza is outstanding and could stand alone should you ever decide to enter a contest with word count restrictions. The poet employs alliteration effectively and dares to be different with descriptiveness. Neat.


    • leander gold member
      January 12, 2008
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      Thank you ver much for the generous comment, and for skipping by my author's page

  • carole21
    January 7, 2008

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    unusual

    unusual and thoughtful . . like "they still swallow what's in sight" and "forking frozen colors of parchment and pixels" . . format works well here


  • Naridill
    November 29, 2007

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    I love your alliteration, it's quite nicely crafted through and through. The end is as strongly influenced as the start which adds nice after taste and before
    But... you did the ultimate evils and as soon as I seen it, a tear ran down my cheek. The title in the poem although it is an awesome title, you cannot steal the suprize and strength of your title and use it within a poem.
    Well you can, as you did, but it will make Heather cry

    Thanks for entering
    & you are being removed but feel free to enter again.


  • Nam
    October 23, 2007

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    I really have nothing to say about this poem. I enjoyed reading it, and I didn't recognize any errors, doesn't mean there aren't any, I just didn't see any.

    A great poem that you have written here.


  • Anna Emkah
    October 1, 2007

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    THE BEST!

    I can see why you like this poem. It's really VERY GOOD. If I didn't know that English wasn't your mother tongue, I probably would not have believed it that you are Belgian. Your English vocabulary is SUPERB. Unfortunately this is what I lack. I am glad though that I know you and can enjoy your work. Thanks! Anna.


  • Lj-
    May 12, 2007

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    Very interesting. Mysterious and obscure.

    I liked:
    "While the moon mumbles
    lamentations to winds,
    rhythms of rupture
    recite within the words."

    Nice write.

  • Dixie
    April 28, 2007

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    So good

    Why do some poems make me feel like giving up, because
    they are like this poem transfixing and beautifully
    written.

    I hope you do well in this contest.

    Dixie

  • Zephyr the Red
    April 23, 2007

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    Alliteration

    The alliteration in your poems is endless.. and never gets old to boot... I thought this was an interesting poem, seeing as to how I could have never imagined someone writing a poem dealing with the slightest hint of a mirror.. other than possibly a haiku... But none the less you show more stuff.. and I failed Pariah contest ... unlike you will do, which seems to me if there is a contest out there you will win something so no good luck to you because u got it all already


  • grass
    April 23, 2007
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    Oh! That gave me cheesy little spine tingles! I'm surprised I haven't seen this around before. I enjoy it! There are many many metaphors that go with mirrors, particuarly broken ones. Your use of language was beautiful, as well. I definatly appriciated this piece. Thankyou very much for the entry.


  • Lady-Pegasus
    April 20, 2007

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    Ohhh, very dark and disturbing, in a good way of course! well done and I see , i think more of what u are looking for now, hehe. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *


  • propensity
    April 20, 2007

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    I remember commenting on this a while ago. We'll see what Liberation of Sense has to say. I really like this piece. For now, it'll be on the finalists list; no promises though for turnout. -Thank you much for the entry, this poem is always a pleasure to read.


  • Hadji Murad
    April 16, 2007
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    Oops


  • Hadji Murad
    April 16, 2007

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    Amaaaaziiiiing. So dark and morbid, but gorgeously painted. The images are lovely and the tone is haunting but----passionate---in a sense. You write this with such conviction and vigor and you wrote this so beautifully.

    Great job.


  • Celticmoon
    April 14, 2007

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    Alright Lee,

    The next time you say you aren't sure of a piece or that you think it stinks I am going to beat you senseless as this is perfection. When J mentioned that my piece reminded him of your work, that is a great compliment for me. I love this as well as all of your work. I have yet to be disappointed with anything I have read of yours. And it is not very often I can even find anything to direct you in possibly correcting or rearranging or anything for that matter. You are an incredible poet and it is an honor to have you in my challenges but even more so to have your friendship.


    Simple Perfection here Lee.......all the way!


    Blessings
    Bel


  • Celticmoon
    April 14, 2007
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    100

    It's perfect. I don't know how to express perfection..lol. You do not make it easy for me.


  • This Doesnt Hurt
    April 11, 2007

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    the picture you got is so gorgous...the poem is amazing...I loved it Great job...keep on writting!!!!!!


    ♥Ashlee

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    April 11, 2007

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    Strong, vivid language marks your work as always! I love the haunting, dark and yet realistic quality of this piece. Well done again! s and best wishes... ~Genie~


  • line shakes
    April 10, 2007

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    *blinks

    the first question tht strikes my mind when i finished reading the poem was " who is this guy?" this is awesome...left me blinking..tht i dunno how to comment on such amazingly beautiful piece. not many can write this kinda thing. its abstract, unique. wonderful choices of words..and they are all very effective. i failed to choose a line tht i like because they are all good. rhythms of rupture, forking frozen colors... i love the way how each stanza connects to each other. wondeful write... in my opinion it is the best poem for the day. where did u fall from?? brilliant..absolutely awesome.


  • narcissus at oasis
    April 10, 2007

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    "There's something
    about broken mirrors;
    they still swallow what's in sight
    and let multiplied reflections
    dance upon their skin."

    as per my commenting style, I insert my favorite lines - it was so difficult to choose because the whole poem was absolutely outstanding. If I weren't worried about space constraints I'd copypaste the whole thing. This is among the best stuff I've read in a while.

    N


  • ThnxsForTheMmrs-x-
    April 10, 2007

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    this write gives me goosebumps, it is stunning and beutiful, takes my breath away. your choice of wods flow and this affect you used is perfect.
    very well writtin..


  • OurLadyOfSorrow
    April 9, 2007
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    Oh.My.God!

    That was so amazing. You are so talented I am almost intimidated!


  • total20clutz
    April 9, 2007
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    Gothlilly is my sis

    if you would like I could ask her what she didn't like. Please tell me if you would same page as her she was using my name


    • leander gold member
      April 10, 2007
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      Well you may always ask her
      I'm here to learn from mistakes so any suggestions are welcome


  • total20clutz
    April 9, 2007

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    gothlilly

    i bet a lot of people asy nice things because of ur name leader but im gona be trutfull i tought it could use some work and i dont hate it but i dont like it sorry


    • leander gold member
      April 9, 2007
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      I would be very grateful if you pointed me out where exactly it could need some work

  • ever1der
    April 9, 2007

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    wish I knew what it's about. I never get this kind of poetry...and so wish I could. I love the art, and the very end.


  • bw43
    April 9, 2007
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    i liked this very much


  • purpledragonfly
    April 9, 2007

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    The title to this one is just wonderful and really caught my attention... I loved the section:
    Scents of solitude
    tinge iridescent ink,
    then ostracize luminous liaisons.
    That's awesome writing...I loved it! And i believe you're correct in your first few lines about mirrors when they are broken.... Betsy


  • Illusionaire Moderators member
    April 9, 2007

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    Stunning

    "There's something

    about broken mirrors"

    What an intriguing opening i thought, shall i progress any further? The answer was yes, and i couldn't be happier that i did, would a truly great read, and an amazing finish "as torn pictures mirror the end" you possess an undeniable talent. Congratulations on being the author of a masterpiece.


  • blueyez
    April 9, 2007

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    hmmmmmmmm I love the verbage and it really makes you think. Peace and Love


  • raggyann
    April 8, 2007
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    this was full of images
    i liked it very much


  • genderideals--
    April 8, 2007

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    lovely

    This was a /very/ lovely poem.




    They dictate the endlessness

    of energetic echoes.



    Was my favorite part. Please keep them coming, you are /very/ good at writing poetry.


  • CurtimusMaximus
    April 8, 2007
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    Nice Work! !kroW eciN

    Nice Work! !kroW eciN I really like the powerful imagery here. The Parchment and Pixel places the ancient against (and with) the modern. Very cathing, engaging opening stanza. The mirror metaphor runs well through the poem, and adds depth! Good work


  • Brandon Ashley
    April 8, 2007
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    nice write!


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    April 8, 2007

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    Incredible!

    I rerally found this poem to ve incredible becaue like others have mentioned your incredible unique masterful methaphors through out the poem really grab ahold of ones attention and it really speaks volumes to one as we read this poem. I really loved the way the poem flows and the incredible all round beauty built within this poem. Keep up the Grrrreat work and a very well written poem. Sincerely, Paul

  • marrow
    April 8, 2007

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    Scents of solitude
    tinge iridescent ink,
    then ostracize luminous liaisons.


    love that part, leander. the title is amazing as well.
    j


  • Third Orbit Mars
    April 8, 2007

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    this is my favorite brand of poetry. the first time you read it, you marvel at its simplicity, but each time you read it again, you get a feel for how complex the emotion behind it is. i like how it tells a story, rather than force one on you. a great write, i enjoyed it.


  • propensity
    April 8, 2007
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    The imagery in the piece is wonderful. It paints such vivid pictures inside the mind of the reader.
    I love the vocabulary and wording you used; it makes the poem seem full and rich. The read is built with depth and a subtle, yet just the right, amount of emotion.
    The rhyme you put into the second and third unitalicized verses are great. They connect to each other in a really good way. The assonance also throughout the piece is wonderful. It adds to the lines, a nice flow.
    I think the title goes excellently with the poem. It gives a little insight as to what the work is about, but doesn't give it away.
    Fabulous piece.

  • Kari gold member
    April 7, 2007

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    What incredible metaphors in this poem. It so goes with the picture..I can't believe this isn't for a contest

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