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harbor light

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harbor light

the lighthouse lends its guiding light
a harbor guardian flaming bright
the ships sail outward and return
the guiding light will always burn

a harbor guardian flaming bright
the steward of the steadfast light
the lighthouse keeper trims the wick
polish the lens and make it slick

the ships sail outward and return
the deadly rocks a great concern
and against the winds and driving rain
the massive lighthouse will remain

the guiding light will always burn
it watches ships from stem to stern
look at the light and think of me
and soon I will return from the sea

 

 

 

Author notes

Retourne

Like so many other French forms, the retourne is all about repetition. It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas), and each line has eight syllables. The trick is that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes do not have to rhyme.

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  • Swan song gold member
    May 17, 2007

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    Once again beautiful form. Very smooth like always. My you have a way with words and seem to be abel to make anything sound good.


  • th3sl4y3r
    May 14, 2007

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    this is an excellent written form.. sometimes the repeats can really stand out when reading a poem like this one, however you have pulled it off really nicely.. I honestly didn't notice the repeats.. the flow, rhythm and rhyme are perfect in this..
    I really like these lines the most..
    "the guiding light will always burn
    it watches ships from stem to stern
    look at the light and think of me
    and soon I will return from the sea"
    beutifully written, well done!!
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
    peace and light always..


  • khalakhelo
    April 8, 2007
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    i really liked ur thoughts


  • hoodoolover silver member
    April 7, 2007

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    This is picture perfect, I am impressed with this form, and you obviously have it mastered, beautiful images!


  • Desire gold member
    April 7, 2007

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    Gorgeous-

    Gorgeous images You bring forth my Friend
    Beautiful form and love the rhyme~
    the picture Inspired verse done Magnificently!
    Love the border too
    Felt as if there

    Best wishes to You in the contest!
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Eulb kcalB
    April 7, 2007
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    BEAUTIFUL


  • PerVirtuous
    April 7, 2007

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    This is spifftastic. I love lighthouses. The form is done to perfection. The flow is beautiful. I give it three bunnies.


  • oldmanriver1942
    April 7, 2007
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    Very good!!

    live this poem! good luck in the contest

    • Amera gold member
      April 7, 2007
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      Jimmy Spirit Wolf

      Thank you and I just have to say; I love your avatar!

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