You hear that it's the sound of my heart shattering,
You feel that it's the cold stream of my tears hitting your lips.
My Cold Forsaken soul is what you're battering.
As my sun disappears behind a morbid eclipse.
You take my hand and swear you've changed.
In Your ember eyes I become hypnotized.
But your actions have become deranged.
And I'm blinded from the hurtful lies.
Enchanted by your smell,
And mesmerized by your beauty.
I Can't See that I've walked into hell.
You've condemmed me, a hellish hounds duty.
Transfixed on the curse you bestowed on me.
I Cry into the agonizing pain.
How could this all come to be.
You played me for a fool again.
My once magnificent angel.
But surely a demon from hell.
Your personalities unchangable.
My soul you've come to sell.
I gave into all of your demands
And you burned it all to ash.
With my heart in your hands.
You shatter it like glass.
now im stuck in the darkness of your heart.
Broken and alone.
You Purposely tore me apart.
And made this pain and misery my morbid home.
A contest entry
- Yeah, so I basically want to jump your bones... by Live with a passion.
450 points, ended April 14, 2007, 11 entries
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Comments
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I really liked it, but there were a lot of grammatical errors, just technical stuff like apostrophe's and stuff. I went through and edited it, if you don't want to change it that's fine, but just so you know.
You hear that it's the sound of my heart shattering,
You feel that it's the cold stream of my tears hitting your lips.
My Cold Forsaken soul is what you're battering.
As my sun disappears behind a morbid eclipse.
You take my hand and swear you've changed.
In Your ember eyes I become hypnotized.
But your actions have become deranged.
And I'm blinded from the hurtful lies.
Enchanted by your smell,
And mesmerized by your beauty.
I Can't See that I've walked into hell.
You've condemmed me, a hellish hounds duty.
Transfixed on the curse you bestowed on me.
I Cry into the agonizing pain.
How could this all come to be.
You played me for a fool again.
My once magnificent angel.
But surely a demon from hell.
Your personalities unchangable.
My soul you've come to sell.
I gave into all of your demands
And you burned it all to ash.
With my heart in your hands.
You shatter it like glass.
now im stuck in the darkness of your heart.
Broken and alone.
You Purposely tore me apart.
And made this pain and misery my morbid home.
Good luck, it really was good.
---Live w/ a {Pash}
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