At a time when life was dark
All odds seemed stacked against me
When I was most weary
And just as my fight had gone
God sent you.
No more I just we and us
Three souls recognized only as one
Will endure as only true love can
A bond neither time nor distance can sever
A new beginning for lovers from a past life.
No longer in pieces I stand
And it’s as if you are the armor
That is my strength
No harm can come
Through this impenetrable shield that has become our love.
You complete me and I you.
Hand in hand we will walk the beaten path
And travel the road less traveled
As soul mates with a purpose
No footprints in the sand
As god carries us to our destiny.
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Wonderful work. I really enjoyed reading this. It is strange what comes to us in life during our hour of need and I like the idea of love becoming the shield from the world. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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This is a really nice poem. Good luck in my contest.
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Thanks for entering my contest. This is really cute. I wish you much luck.
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Wow, this is really sweet and beautiful. I enjoyed reading this. Great write and keep it up. ~
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Well isn't this nice! However, why doesn't this god of which you write show itself to people in this physical world? Perhaps you are the god(s) of whom you write. -
Cool
This was a nice one... It was relaxing for starters, and it points out a spot in life when all of us just need someone to rest on and protect us... We all want someone who we can jive with but this one hits the nail on the head, but overall it was a nice poem... however the color scheme makes my eyes hurt for some reason.
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No more I just we and us
Two souls recognized only as one
Will endure as only true love can
A bond neither time nor distance can sever
A new begining for lovers from a past life
these lines are amazing.
and also I do admire these lines..
You complete me and I you
Hand in hand we will walk the beaten path
Travel the road less traveled soul mates with a purpose
No footprints in the sand
As god carries us to our destiny
the entire piece was really very good to read.
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Lovely sentiments. Perfect love.
Form: nice, could be trimmed a bit.
Structure: Well enough.
Grammar: a few places where punctuation is needed.
Overall: very nice piece.
Thank you for sharing.
rous
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I loved the image of past lovers being reborn as new lovers in this world. A really uplifting poem for first thing in the morning
There was a few minor grammatical errors, but nothing major that stopped this being a great poem well done!
"No longer in pieces I stand
And it’s as if you are the armor"
That's such an original and lovely thing to write Great write!
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beautifully written
amazed...
thank you for sharing us this beautiful poem.
loved every stanza and the feeling you placed in this lovely piece.
loved the last stanza
your poem made me want to hold on to the love that i have right now...
good luck in everything that you do
You complete me and I you
Hand in hand we will walk the beaten path
Travel the road less traveled soul mates with a purpose
No footprints in the sand
As god carries us to our destiny
my fav.
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speechless...I long for love like this...good luck
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These words are filled with hope. Everyone needs their other half. ****Sighs****
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thank you for your comments
I was beginning to think no one like my poetry -
This was beautfiul.
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beautiful :) :) :)
I am new to this site i was browsing and saw this...
great write and good luck in this contest although I dont think you need it
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