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Temporary Ink

On a walk I took through no where
My eyes pointed towards my feet
With the only other soul who was there
The last I had ever expected to meet
My eyes first met his when I heard him scream
Looked familiar, but he didn't recognize me
So he must have fallen out of my daydreams
'Cause when he saw my chains he said "I'll set you free"
Then from my pocket, I removed a blank page
He asked if he could write his name
Using his pen to unlock my cage
He spoke while I was realeased from shame
"Remember the temporary ink
I'll teach you to smile and not be afraid
It's okay, there's no need to move slow or rethink
Just know that in time, my writing will fade"

I watched as the hours extended to days
And holes were burning through the chains
Where I still stood smiling within the sun's rays
Written on the white page, his name still remained
Like the day we met, it was bold once again
Alive just like the pictures I drew
My book was wide open, so he took out his pen
And wrote "I am always here for you"
He pressed down so hard, he ripped holes in the white
It caused us to hold on a much stronger bind
Through the tears escaped a blinding light
I couldn't see into the back of my mind
I was forgetting the temporary ink
Through five difference scenes, we ran and we laid
We couldn't go backwards in time to rethink
So I denied his writing would someday fade

Now time has gone by, and our page has gone blank
The chains are back and I have no escape
The metal was draggig me down when I sank
And the liquid contorted the colors and shapes
It enters my brain, so I cannot think
All locked up is where I will probably be
The permanent marks from temporary ink
Is everything I am able to see
The hands on the clock had spun way too fast
They erased the words that he wrote and I read
The thought slipped my mind that it wouldn't last
And when I tried to reach him, he said:
"Remember this was temporary ink
It wasn't right and I shouldn't have stayed
We made some wrong choices that we can't rethink
Time is gone and you watched my writing fade."

Author notes

(Date written is unknown).... This was last summer, I'm pretty sure... This was about a very complicated relationship I was in...

The first stanza is about meeting the guy... The line "My eyes first met his when I heard him scream" is actually true... lol He came up behind me and my friend and screamed to scare the crap out of us... then he gave me his number and we hooked up... it was pretty random. He lived like half an hour away from me though, so it was harder for us to meet up... We pretty much just fooled around with each other... It was exiting to me... this was the first time I had ever got attension from a guy... first relationship... pretty much first everything.

The second stanza is about when we actually got serious (or so I thought)... As much as I hate to say this, we were in love with each other... And he took something from me that I'll never get back (if ya know what I mean)... but before we did that, he told me that we couldn't be toghether forever because of my parents and the fact that we were half an hour away... I thought nothing of this, because to most people, this wouldn't really matter if they were so called "in love"... so I just kind of ignored this without even realizing it... I still have an email he sent me where he sent these EXACT words: "i love you and i would always try to find where u are i wont give up on trying to see you always follow your heart and do what you feel and you always will at least have me backing you up no matter what you do"... Yeah, I know he has terrible grammar.

The third stanza is about right fucking after he changed my life (literally)... he just fell off the face of the earth. He started to IGNORE me!... After he had been telling me how much he fucking loved me for almost a YEAR... So finally I just called him and asked what the hell was up... and here is what I can recall of what he said (I still remember some of our exact conversation): "Remember what I told you? I knew you loved me, but I didn't think you meant like long term toghether forever kind... It was never supposed to be like that. It wasn't from the begining. I thought you knew... and I regret doing what I did."

All of this left me with the question, "If we were supposed to be temporary, why did he change my life like he did?"... That's what this poem is about. Permanent marks from temporary ink.
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  • we lit a flame
    February 2

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    From this piece, I feel like I know you- as if you were a replica of myself. I see so much of myself in your words- I've been through a similiar experience and I FEEL what you're saying- I honestly do. The extended metaphor was creative, the words were honest and captivating, and somehow, I've just become attatched to this piece. Wonderful.

    Best Wishes,
    Cordelia


  • XHollowXEyesX
    September 25, 2007

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    wow this is an awesome write. the rhythm and flow of this piece is so catchy and adds impact to the meaning behind the 'story' A little long for my liking but none the less a touching write.
    Thanks for entering
    All the best
    ~Hollow~

  • freestallion
    September 12, 2007

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    This poem was a bit long, but the extended metaphor of temporary ink was really quite good. Its very creative. However, there are still a few spelling errors and it could be revises. Thanks for entering my contest.

  • LadysDragon
    August 12, 2007
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    Catchy,thank you for the entry and good luck!

  • FightOffYourDemons
    May 13, 2007

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    This is so good. It's really catchy. It draws you in right from the beginning. you get caught up in the story and the beat. This poem has a real flow and rhythm. I love it. I also love the symbolism. The link between a fading love and fading ink. It's so creative and well used. There is a lot of feeling in this probably because it comes from a real experience. You can feel the regret in this poem. You really gave me what I wnated for this poem. Thanks for entering. I will be judging really soon. Sorry about the wait it's just taht I have had a lot going on

    Nikki

  • ddollfacek
    April 15, 2007
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    Dang. That majorly sucks balls. >< I would totally like, grr, I don't know. I'd do something bad to him. Somehow. Lol. I like how there was a lot of emotion put into this piece, and I also like how you explained your poem in your authors notes. Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck!


  • sublimewriter
    April 6, 2007
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    ouch

    "I didn't think you meant like long term toghether forever kind..." that's hard to take. *hugs. i feel for you. the third stanza is a real kick in the pants, because after the high point of the poem- falling in love, there's the equivalent to "let's be friends". it's hard to know how to react to this.

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