Shattered
pieces
of
my
heart ....
Lie
scattered
far
apart...
Hurtful words
Inner hell....
Shattered
pieces
from
my
heart
just
fell...
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Written July 12th, 2003
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This Is Amazing, But Why Does That Not Surprise Me
Its Because You Are As Well....Your Strength Is Remarkable
Take Care Of You & Thank You For Reading & Commenting On My Poem
Youre Very Inspiring To Me God Bless You ALWAYS 
xoxoxoxo
Angel -
short and to the point.Few words can dig as deep and paragraphs.Well written.Blessed be
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For the sequel to this poem, please read "First Contact." Thank you, Gazzelle
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Extremely creative! This is how I felt in seven years of pain before My Darling Kristi came into my life. The image goes so well with the words here to make such a powerful piece.
Jim aka ThePoetAmuse -
stunning
Hurtful words
Inner hell....
Shattered
pieces
from
my
heart
just
fell...
beautifully written, this is a poem that many can relate to, you have captured a broken heart exceptionally well. beautiful picture for a beautiful poem. t/y for writing and posting this. ~Julzzz~
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As you can tell by my name... Hearts are something I cherish... And probably the reason I cherish them and hold them so dear is because I know what it feels like for them to break..
Very heart-felt <- 
and touching...... I love the way it's set up, is that something you have to do yourself in the "adding text" box? I didn't think we could do that since it offers a "alignment"? Anyhoo - beautiful and very touching! Precious hearts ~
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really really good
Simple yet powerful, it is a good poem. I have always had trouble with the short poems like this. Especially when putting rhymes into it as well. You are very skilled with short poems as all of your short poems show. Keep up the good work. -
wow this is a really great poem. i love how everything rhymes.... that has always been a little difficult to me. this is a sad but beautiful poem.
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aching
If there is anything I can do, or if you need to talk...please don't hesitate...This is so sad, somber and has a feeling of hopelessness...I wish I could help...give you a hug...sit and sip coffee and just talk...Anyway, as to the poem, I do like the style...very interesting form...sort of conveys a feeling of slipping...either away or backward...sigh...HUGS, Rowan -
Excellent
Short yet sweet. An absolutely fantastic piece from you Blushfulmoon! I do enjoy your work!
Keep it up darling..
~Somber -
Oh this is so amazing...it definitely depicts the shattered feelings of a broken heart...fabulous presentation, it really adds to the emotion of the write...awesome!!!!
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Great Work
Once again, beautiful write. Hope this is not your heart you speak of. You seem to have such a lovely soul. A good heart does not deserve to be scattered. I love your work. Hope all is well. Skipper -
your scattered words add strength to the meaning of your poem Susan. together with the amazing picture it gives so much initial impact to the reader and the words complete the visual image.
Marvelous work of art.
~Von~ -
i love this poem...
short and succinct,
you have captured a
very vivid image/emotion
in your words.
i love the way the words fall,
it creates a neat visual effect.
~Clare -
oooooooo I liked that it was so POW!! I really liked it!! Great write!
MMP
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Ooo.. very strong.. very! That's great though because I love the rhyming and then flow.. lovin it!
I enjoyed reading this a lot.. great write.
*Raven -
WOW ,great write .Though the poem is short but the meaning is so vivid and moving.
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considering how bad things are,
Would I be going way to far?
To ask for your heart, If they tear you apart,
I'll keep it at home in a jar LOL sorry sus.
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Mmm, very creative Susan! Very sad as well. The structure was brilliant
The picture seems to me to be perfect for this poem
Wodnerful...
-Heather -
Well done! I have felt this way many times myself.
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this is so touching, so sad. I loved the way the words looked scattered like the pieces of your heart. The last lines are the most emotionally jarring - makes the reader want to cry or comfort you.
come see me
~Scarlet -
So very powerful, you alright, hun?
Feels like things are just falling
apart around you. Painful and lost.
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reminds me of a write i wrote but i like the style you did yours in so much better.....wonderful job blush
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OMG! Blush what is going on?
This is the sadest poem I have seen by you. So succinct, you always seem to smile through tough things. I am so glad you are releasing your feelings. Succinct but powerful words my friend. IM me.
Red -
Oh Susan, its so short but it says so much, i know what you're going through right now sweetheart but trust me, things will get better... Life sucks sometimes but it cant suck all the time, just remember that. You always write so beautifully and i truly love this piece... Thanks for sharing it with us, its very lovely.
Lynn -
I have definitely felt like this more times than I want to count. Love the picture. Pen on.
*Amanda* -
wow, so short..but very power ful!
i really like it! great job~!
stay strong..and write on!
feel free to read mine!
forgotton -
OH WOW!!! that was amazing! It's bold and powerful, and i LOVE it!
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Amazingly Beautiful, Susan
Sad, but short and sweet
Love ya,
Karen
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whoa!! amazing I love it!! Powerfully done and I love the format. Awesome write sweetie
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Dearest Susan,
What a sad write - the difficult - but brave - part is trying to pick up those pieces one by one ... and putting the precious heart together again, so that it may cope with its sorrow.
May you find comfort within His Love, dearest Poetess.
Take care,
Myra
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This is excellent. Very well written and a great choice of words. I like the rhyming and format. Hell, I like all of it
-sock-
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ohhhh, susan, me likes this very cool, simple and nice and short.
I really liked the little rhyme, everything was just so nicely worded and spaced out and stuff
very pretty and original
kayla* -
another ultra nice piece from you!
course, i've come to expect nothing less than complete brilliance from you!
by all means, keep up the great work!
blessed be
mike -
Oh... god, do I know this feeling... yes, my heart is feeling shattered right now... and so this hits home. Paanful and poignant write, Susan.
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Lie
scattered
far
apart...
I like the symbolism here.
Hurtful words
Inner hell....
This is the profound part. Hell is never outside, just as heaven is never outside, of me. For me, either state of mind is irrelevant WITHOUT me. I am the equation. I am not heaven nor hell, niether God nor Satan, symbolically or otherwise. I am just a...divider of choices or uniter of hopes. Yeah, the pieces are far apart in time. But pain and joy are eternal. So is the present. Therefore, thank you for the write. All you need is love...la la la la la. LOL! I'm in a wird state of mind/heart. Don't mind me. Later, alligator. ET -
REally Really cool picture i love that, this poem was cool i liked how you wrote it i liked it it was short which are good guess there easier to read well keep it up
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exce;;emt
Few words, lots of impact and emotion. I love the unique structure. Wonder piece. The picture is a great effect
~Kathy -
Awesome!
Awesome write! I loved it Short but very descriptive! Very nicely penned Thanks for sharing!
James
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Oh, this was really good!! I am impressed how you made so few words mean so much.
~All 28~ -
ONCE AGAIN. I FOUND YOUR WORK BREATH TAKING. PROBALLY BECAUSE I CAN RELATE. THIS IS A LOVELY PIECE. AS ALWAYS. WANT YOU GO CHECKOUT MY NEW ONE.
KEEP IT COMING, MY FRIEND!!!!!!!!
LET THE WORDS FLOW ONTO THE PAPER!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-QUEEN OF THE DAMNED -
Perfect...
In every way....
Much love
~Pamela -
Nicely done. This was succinct, meaning and creative. The scattering of words trailing downward did well for the imagery here. It tied the poem together so neatly that I wished it longer to give me more. (and more...)
Flow, word choice, etc... They were all very appropriate for the piece.
Definitely something worth reading a second time. (or third... or more...)
kindest regards,
Kimmie -
Holy Moly!! I love it!!
So few words.. so deep a meaning... Excellent poem!!
The artwork and the way you've splashed your words up there just fit so well with the poem. I've felt that way before too.. You've summed up one deep feeling.. in few words. Love it!
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Not a word out of place,,,and each one perfectly said
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Great play with few words here, tossing them upon the page just as if it was indeed you heart instead that lay here, for all to see.
(Great artwork too by the way )
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oh I like this!
I like the rhymes and I like the form.
very creative, and beautifully written.
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