For all of mankind
The spectre of time he could rewind
And make our lives better
If we just believed
His blood wasn’t shed just for the sake of public cry
He chose to die for me and in spite of the reasons why
Amidst the fact that I don’t deserve his love
I really don’t deserve the mercy
Keeping me from what I deserve
I really don’t deserve his grace
Giving me what I don’t deserve
The only thing I deserve you ask?
To know that his resurrection was about me
He did it for me and only me
For the sole, singular purpose of allowing the word
Free
To be part of my vocabulary
A closer inspection of the resurrection
Shows that it was never about those that despised him
But it was about something more than a whim
From the Father
His love us
More than our comprehension
More than our sinful neglection
More than naturalistic apprehension
Where would I be without the Resurrection?
Spare no details, tell me exactly what you think about this ....
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you know i just thought of something, instead of a repeat on the "had" for a rhyme, "grabbed" might be better:
Keeping me from what I should've had
I really don’t deserve his grace
Giving me what I couldn't have grabbed
giving the contrast of trying to seize grace with all that we have but still can't do it, without God. anyhow thats my suggestion, hopefully its ok. -
Nice!!!
very good write, not only do I agree with the msg but I enjoyed the flow and the vocabulary, its refreshing to read something inspiring and written well, if I had one suggestion it might be to reword the second and fourth lines in the third stanza, from using too many "deserve"s
I really don’t deserve the mercy
Keeping me from what I should've had
I really don’t deserve his grace
Giving me what I couldn't have had
or something along those lines, but if not, I think its ok, just something to think about, I have one write that I've won three gold on, and I still go back and reread it and end up changing something because I think it still could sound better, bad habbit I guess. anyhow great write three applauds from me!!!
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it'd be cool if you added the verse about how deep is god's love and how wide and how tall it is and how much more one can comprehend...
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Maybe, but it would have been a forced write, not within its original flow, how he gave it to me.
Thanks just the same.
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He has spoken
Absolutely amazing form you have here, baby.
Gr8 Write!
Be Blessed
Your wife,
Ephiphany
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Awesome! You can really make someone think with this!
It truly is beyond our comprehension. He just did it for us!! Great job!!
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Ah.
Now this is the truth and written so well. I really enjoyed this piece and you should be proud of it. Everyone should read this poem and be blessed by it.
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