She loves me,
she loves me not.
She's so pretty,
she's got me bought.
She sees me,
she sees me not.
I watch her sleep,
I won't get caught.
She hears me,
she hears me not.
She winks at me,
my face feels hot.
She feels me,
she feels me not.
Her eyes cut through me,
will my blood clot?
She tastes me,
she tastes me not.
She kisses me,
my stomach's in a knot.
She'll leave me,
she'll leave me not.
She's left me in the rain,
she has forgot.
She loves me,
she loves me not.
I'll never find out,
I've been shot.
Author notes
"Life is too short to not tell someone you love them, if you truely do love them."
Please tell me what you think
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this was very creative. Old nursery type rhyme written with a serious modern twist
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Wonderfully expressed
So true are your words, We need to tell the world of our love for every one that is important to us, Before its to late. Wonderful poem Well enjoyed thank you for the great message of love.
LISA
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lol! this was a very hmmm cut poem let me say it made me giggle a litle with that sort of bashful of innocense feel you did a great job on this ~ jewels ~
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Don't want to blabber on here on the precisely cut points made on this pen. . Slickly done, like a movie scene playing in my head, and I enjoyed every reel...
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I agree...
cherish every moment while you are still able too.
I really liked this, shows a lot of truth and emotions.
Ephiphany
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Too true,
If you really love someone LET THEM KNOW!
I loved this but the ending was a surprise.
Hugs ~sugar~
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The ending...I wouldn't say I like my own ending as much as the rest of the poem, but it was how I planned to end it. When I was writing though, I didn't know how to keep the poem's form and still allow the poem to lead up to that same ending. So I just kinda slapped it in there.
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Another good poem. You're a great poet.
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