For you my love's been growing
From the day we first met.
You have always had in heart
But your heart I could not get.
We became the best of friends
But I kept my love inside,
Because I didn’t want to take the chance
Of having it denied.
And then one day I got nerves
To tell you how I feel
Cause all the love I have for you
Could no longer be concealed.
To my surprise you told me
You wanted more your self,
But as friend we grew to close
To take a chance to something else.
And if we took a chance as lovers
Then our friendship wouldn’t last,
I listened to your words
But to me it didn’t make sense.
To easy my pain
I told my self there are other fishes in the sea
And a girl would have to be a fool to deny a guy like me.
But no matter whom I dated
You were always in my head.
No matter how much I looked around
A love like yours was no where to be found
I couldn’t care for anyone
Like I cared for you,
So to me another girl was never gonna do.
I know you bound to give you heart
To someone else someday
So I choose to keep my distance
So that I wont be in your way.
So now I keep on wondering
If telling you was wrong,
Should I not have said a thing?
Or did I just wait to long?
I think if we took a chance
Things could have been great,
But I don’t think I should take the blame
Because I choose to wait.
To say anyone was right or wrong
I guess that’s it depends
But I think if you are lovers,
You should start off as friends.
I’m still in love with you.
But I guess that you will never know.
A contest entry
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Comments
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I posted the original.
Here's the link to my poem. I posted it on this site for you all to read and judge for yourselves. http://allpoetry.com/poem/5749195 -
You ruined it!
Actually, after reading the poem the way it was posted, it was chopped up quite a bit. You can see the original, the way it was supposed to be read here. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F8SkamRhtpY -
You're a thief
I am the true author of this poem. I wrote it in 1995 and posted it on youtube in 2006. It's pathetic that someone would steal someone else's work and claim it as their own. I really enjoy all of the positive comments about the poem, but they are all directed towards the wrong person. -
absolutely beautiful.. I know exactly how this feels..
on a silly note, this poem reminds me an abba song.. LOL
"If you change your mind, I’m the first in line
Honey I’m still free
Take a chance on me"
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And if we took a chance as lovers
Then our friendship wouldn’t last,
I listened to your words
But to me it didn’t make sense.
words I have heard often in poetry and it always makes me laugh. they are always uttered by someone who is araid of his wife of of commitment. thank you for the entry -
very lovely..ty for the comment on my poem
take care
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wow
that was amazing and much better then what i wrote....yours shows deepth mine still cant touch on yet.....thank you for sharing such a wonderful pieces
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pretty good
the poem is pretty good n i must say every one might have experience this stage once in their lifetime.
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pretty good
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it's really good, but why did you stoped rhyming then star again? that spoiled it for me.
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i had to focus on the meaning than than the rhyme.thanks for the comment
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You didn't focus on anything other than stealing someone else's work and then butchering it. The original poem rhymes from beginning to end.
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universely relatable
we have all had that friend.. the thing here is love is an instant.. remember when you first realized you loved her... that verry moment .. thats the best it could or would have ever been.. you would never love her more than in that instant.. you may need and desire her more .. but love her more than at that second? i don't believe it's possible!
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Oh my... I'm only eleven and even I can't write like that...
There was so much emotion.
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Awww this is beautiful, extremely heartbreaking but... well, it's heartfelt at the same time. I don't think I could ever tell my ex that he still holds a place in my heart. One, because I'd be too scared/upset and two because he's a completely pillock and I know I shouldn't love him. Beautifully written!
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thanks for finding delight in my poem.
its was a big plesure join your contest.
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It's not your poem you thief.
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Very deeply emotional piece. Good rythmic flow with a good story line. If truely personal experienced. It must be noted that issues such as this are a part of everyone's life in living. However sad it is,I'm sorry it was ever felt. Yet know this too on a personal level. All in all, a good descriptive verse.
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I felt every word of this piece, I have been through this before. I really like that I could relate to it. Thank you for this wonderful poem in my contest and good luck.
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Excellent
I liked how you spilled all your emotions on paper creating a story, although a sad one. The rhyme flows very well without detracting from the poem. Love can be very difficult at times. I hope one day you convince her to be yours.
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1) It can be about heart break
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This was beautiful and I can relate to these feelings on many different levels. You did a great job here in expressing yourself, opening up for the world to read. I truly enjoyed this love story that brought me to tears
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thank you all for your encouragement comments.
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i felt like crying after this! i loved some of the rhyming it gave it a really nice touch!
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Great
I really liked this, especially because it very much reflected a situation I've been through myself.. Good use of words, the form worked fairly well, and there were some good rhymes in there..
I like the stanza beginning with 'So now I keep on wondering', very good, it flows well and it key to the poem.
Good on you, and keep writing!
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