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Pretend, Beautiful

Hey Beautiful,
With the shining
Silk hair.
You have the face
Of an angel.
Willowy and
Graceful, you're
Prefect.
That's for sure.

Pretend, Beautiful.
Act like it's
As they say. Don't
Let them see past
The smile you wear
All day. Mask
You're tears that
Slide through concieling
mascara at night.
Sheild their ears
From all the screams,
And the way you sometimes
Throw and kick things.
You lose control, Beautiful.
You're weak, Beautiful.

Pretend, Beautiful.

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  • Mingan Tzar Avarus
    April 17, 2007

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    I didn't like this one, it didn't seem to flow well, and you seemed too concerned with sentance structure and not enough with the poetry it's self. ~Corey~


  • ObliviousReality
    April 12, 2007

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    Awwww how sweet! And how terribly sad! But it's as said in the poem "Beautiful". That ending just breaks my heart. You did an amazing job on it though! True talent. Such powerful emotions, sent across so gently. Excellently written too


  • Mingan Tzar Avarus
    April 8, 2007
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    Thank you for your entry and good luck in my contest.

    ~Corey~


  • love tank x
    April 6, 2007
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    "Don't
    Let them see past
    The smile you wear
    All day. Mask
    You're tears that
    Slide through concieling
    mascara at night."


    "You lose control, Beautiful.
    You're weak, Beautiful.

    Pretend, Beautiful."

    Wow, intense. Such a strong message here;; I love it. <3