candy apple red dress
apple wine martini
table set for two
restaurant orders taken
filet mignion,
sweet champagne
summer heat sensation
undulating bodies
heat rising,
fueled by fire
tango for two
Carmon showing
take your seats
glasses unfolding
passion speaks
swirling rose
upon the floor
flavors savored
falling asleep
beneath a lovers
moon
Translation in Russian:
Леди в красном
яблоко леденца красное платье
мартини вина яблока
набор стола для два
взятые заказы ресторана
филе mignion,
сладкое шампанское
летняя сенсация высокой температуры
холмистые тела
повышение высокой температуры,
питаемый огнем
танго для два
Показ Carmon
возьмите ваши места
разворачивание очков
страсть говорит
циркулирование повысилось
на пол
ароматы смаковали
отключение
ниже любителей
луна
A contest entry
- *~-* The Passion of Red *-~* by Dragonsblood.
450 points, ended April 18, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wow this is one beautiful piece of poetry and to see it in Russian as well... only shows just how wonderfuly talinted you really are. Your poem is very sensuous and so wonderfully thought prevoking and it just paints so many breath taking images within my mind....
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lovely
Oh the russian is gorgeous I sadly cant read russian but the words are beautiful in english and look so wonderful int he other language it adds more to the beauty of the piece. well done I like it much! -
even if i hated this write, which i don't i would have to applaud your ability to translate this into russian. wow! i told my son tonight i would like to translate a few into spanish but this is amazing. viyanna rosemarie
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Whew!
Now that was hot. Really is great. Good luck in the contest.
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oh cool! i couldn't read the russian, but it still added to it quite a bit...which was pretty neat! i loved the imagery in this, it was incredible!
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Love all the heat throughout this Sie! Every word takes you back to the screaming of the red!
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damn
you have to be one saxy lady, Sie, to be able to turn on some one with a poem, wow, must one hell a of woman -
Written with decorum
A sensual piece but written with the utmost decorum.
Suggestive but tastefully so.
Found the red on black a little hard for my tired old eyes and the Russian was completely lost on me but I can see why you used this format. Very cleverly done.
I have used this layout many times myself and find it to be very effective in delivering the way you want the poem to be read.
Excellent work.
Take care,
Sammy
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You'll have to let me take you to a dinner opera, we don't have them here in Texas... go figure! lol A warm and subtly seductive piece, spiced with the exotic flavors of Italy and Russia. This approaches sensory overload when it portrays a quiet intimate evening for two. An inspiring write!
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The reds, even the opera, the cascades of colored passion each leading closer to the pulsing heart. Then the sunsets and the colors bleed to black. Except for this lovers moon who watches the waters ride to pulsing red in the lovers hearts. Delightful. Sing the rainbow one shade at a time. Love Tom B.
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oh, i like it...there is the image of a great night out all mixed up with what happens aferwords...unless I read it wrong, but even if i did, it's still good
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so impressive
a work of art in two languages, the poem is very well done the dress, the scene, the passionate Tango... so very nice and very well done...PK
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gee what have I turned you into
that single file word poem
has turned you into a wizz at this type writing...I dont know what it is called.....but I have written many....just never posted them here...this is very seductive indeed.....Id say like it in english best.....lost with the russian...ha ha
Mally
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WOW This is cool I like the better than the first one. this one has alot depth and is strong. thanks for linking me to this. please check out some of me work
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You are winning lots of hearts with this series, do we expect more colors from your pen lol I enjoy them so much but I am hungry now
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Brilliant piece
I like this a lot. The imagery and descriptions are wonderful. I love your Russian too. The flow is great. This is short, yet to the point. The order, the meal, the drink and the enjoyment of each others company at the end. Great writing.
Wayne
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applaud
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I like it, its one of those poems that settles in your stomach and takes away your hunger, it is satisfin
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You know I always did love Russian girls, they are the most beautiful in the world.
And this verse proves it!
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Thank you
happy you did it in Russian, was not sure I could read it otherwise. What a lovely night to remember. The lady in red, remiinds me of the betrayal of John Dillinger, the lady he took to the movies was dressed in red. They, FBI, shot him down like a dog.
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Seductive
A delightful menu for love. Let's eat...
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