I once was a small child forgotten in a room
there was never nowhere to go, Mom had left us on our own
Life was hard but I had no one to tell.
I took care of my brothers, to drugs mom had fell.
The drugs had control of her, I was lost and alone.
The P.O. took her away, nine years later she owns a home.
I thought her rules sucked, so I started to rebel.
I was taught to be good, I thought, “Go to hell!”
I took off to do my own thing, never cared what she’d say.
Now I know who was right, because prison is the price I pay.
My brothers will one day learn, they’re out doing the same.
I try to tell them but they think I’m pretty lame.
Soon I’ll be home, little do they know.
Once I get there my anger will show.
A peak at my life, my Family I love dearly.
I’m coming home to stay, a life to start I’m ready!!
I’ve seen my mom change, she has a whole new high.
I’m looking for one myself, She makes everything alright.
By my side she stands, a debt never to repay.
Unless my love is accepted, then too much she’ll say.
I love and respect her so much, I don’t know how to show it.
I’ll send her this little poem and maybe she’ll see it.
I’m 16 years old and in prison.
Next time she has something to say, I’ll listen!!
Jacob s
A contest entry
- Anything (within reason) Goes by Larue.
335 points, ended April 19, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Numbing the Pain by FaeRae.
900 points, ended April 24, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Please let me Know . . .
Since I asked for only entries that are NOT current entries in another poem, please let me know if you are still in the "Anything Goes" contest. I'd really hate to drop this . . . it was such a unique work.
Blessings,
***Rae*** -
God has his ways of turning things around! God bless you for sharing your story with us because it can be help for those who are going through similar situations. Great and emotional piece.
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Wow
So much has happened to you for one so young; I'm glad things are looking up for you and I hope you stay healthy. This was incredibly brave to put this out there for all to see. Thanks for entering!
FaeRae -
very nice
this is a very nice poem. i agree with Leocadia (my sissa
) the flow is a bit off. i can realte to this in a way. now my mom isnt a drugy but she can act like an obsessive "being" every once in a while. this is a very good poem. good luck and keep writing! 
jess -
Your poem is no longer being considered as a winner for the contest Anything (within reason) Goes, due to your failure to follow all rules. If the problem is corrected, it will be reconsidered.
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Wow, I agree with live - I really hope this isn't true. Still being a teenager, I can almost relate (although to a different degree.) Nice theme, wonderful writing, but the flow is a bit off. If you feel like changing it, go ahead. It's a good poem no matter what, but I am judging on rhythm and rhyming patterns and the like. Good luck, thanks for entering!
-Skye -
I sure hope this is not true , Its a good poem , it shows other young people what can happen if they start to rebel , its a hard life we all have to live I remenber being a teenager too and some of the things I did
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