it consumes your thoughts and enters your dreams
all of your life, you thought you would get it
it was part of your hopes, that’s what you thought
it secretly nests so deep in your mind
it takes no prisoners and it plays no sides
all of your happiness became an illusion
you fight so hard to keep that illusion
you think it’s the answer to all your dreams
it’s just like a plate with two different sides
no matter what, you are on the wrong side of it
you think your problem is, your own deranged mind
reality is stricken and cowers in thought
you wonder why you spend time in your thought
you know it is there, this piece of illusion
and you keep it sacred in that part of your mind
it happened to you, your hopes and your dreams
it has always been there, you can’t get away from it
people won’t help because they will take sides
so look at yourself and look at both sides
it never existed, not as you thought
it’s not visceral, you can not see it
a factoid of life, a simple illusion
it destroys your hopes and ruins your dreams
so take a good look at your own human mind
question your thoughts because God won’t mind
for only the trinity has three sides
there is no free ride, there are no free dreams
reality strikes, It’s not what you thought
a precious few are given the illusion
let truth be known, they don’t know they have it
very few of the chosen realize they have it
it’s dormant and waiting in deep your mind
it’s tangible psyche and not a consciousness of illusion
so pick up the plate and look at both sides
and once you have it, it’s not what you thought
living your fantasy, living your dreams
so when you’re dismayed and attacked on all sides
just keep mind it’s your esoteric thought
it’s not an illusion; it’s real and you’re living dreams
Author notes
Option 5. Thoughts
Be it fame, love, security or wealth, we all have it parked in the back of our minds. We may not even admit it to ourselves because we have dismissed the hope of getting it long ago. Think; don’t you already have it? For if something more comes along, it won’t be what you dreamed of anyway; so live your dreams now because they’re here.
Sestina:
The sestina is a strict ordered form of poetry, dating back to twelfth century French troubadours. It consists of six six-line (sestets) stanzas followed by a three-line envoy. Rather than use a rhyme scheme, the six ending words of the first stanza are repeated as the ending words of the other five stanzas in a set pattern. The envoy uses two of the ending words per line, again in a set pattern.
First stanza, ..1 ..2 ..3 ..4 ..5 ..6
Second stanza, ..6 ..1 ..5 .. 2 ..4 ..3
Third stanza, ..3 ..6 ..4 ..1 ..2 ..5
Fourth stanza, ..5 ..3 ..2 ..6 ..1 ..4
Fifth stanza, ..4 ..5 ..1 ..3 ..6 ..2
Sixth stanza, ..2 ..4 ..6 ..5 ..3 ..1
Concluding tercet:
middle of first line ..2, end of first line ..5
middle of second line ..4, end of second line..3
middle if third line ..6, end of third line ..1
In a list
A contest entry
- What IF??? by The Order of Chaos.
650 points, ended May 4, 2007, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ok I like this, I see the philosophy in it, good idea. It's long but it's not TOO long, just like I asked, nice and good luck!
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"it’s not an illusion; it’s real and you’re living dreams"
I love that line. This is very unique I must say. Question the life we're living. -
Unique approach compared to most of the other entries in my contest that tend to look at a huge picture or generally at religion. Thank you for giving me something different to read ^_^
This is a great piece, dreams for the future... I believe I my signature will respond to that idea.
The Only Dependable thing about the future is uncertainty
-Chaos
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Bonita !
Beautiful thoughts penned ever so well- enjoyed reading them - loved the flow- the contents -everything -
A mental prison
I love it, this poem has creeped into the darkest regions of my mind, and has built itself a cocoon, not for metamorphisis, for this poem couldn't be allowed to change, but for security, that i may remember it for its exellence.
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What if you learned everything you decide is true, becomes so because of your decision? What then would that say of humility, would it make us ineffectual? And what of modesty? Would it then stunt our growth? What magic could then be made of hope? Could it not be the wellspring of miracles? And confidence, belief the cornerstone of Genesis? What manner of self control would we exert if we knew thought was action. Expectation was prophetic. Love was salvation. Hatred was murderous. Envy a carcinogen. The Trinity was Perception, Expectation, and Affirmation. That we were truly the Temple of The Divine. Created Creators in the image of God. What IF? A thought provoking write my sister. Well done!
xxoo
dk
In the immortal words of Buzz Lightyear...
TO INFINITY AND BEYOND!!!
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Thanks for reading it Sis; I knew you'd understand it.
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very pensive write you have penned here Amera...
to dream and wish and believe that it exist without visually seeing it , some would consider this act very foolish and pointless...
I on the other hand agree with you. I believe that if you think it , believe in it , dream it then it must exist...powerful the laws of this universe...excellent write
love
Jamila
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Wow that is a very thought provoking piece, very powerful words and images you have painted with your words. A very nice write.
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Wonderful job
As I read it
the first thing that went through my mind
was
"wait a minue, this has to be a form"
Awesome job
Penned excellently
and the sestina is perfect
All your words kept echo-ing through the poem
creating quite an effect
keep it up
much luv,
NeveR ♥
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Magnificent!
Love this piece You have penned for it is Thought provoking~
Powerful images and leaves Inspiration to carry on
within our walk in Life
Wonderful form
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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I love it, you go so deep into the thought of fame and beauty and all of those things, awesome job!
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SNAP!!!!
Damn Sis... you remember when we first met and I told you that you would rock the hell out of a Sestina??? Well...I far underestimated what you would do with it... you have gone SO deep with this piece...I am so freakin' inspired by this... you have NO idea... I mean...not just inspired poetically...but inspired in LIFE ITSELF....
You are so amazing Sis... I mean this from my heart... this is so thought provoking...
Talent abounds from within you lady...
you are amazing...
xoxo
Heidi
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Great write with a valuable message. We do have dreams that may or may not be filled but, we also have choice of what we will chose to do with these dreams. Some good ,some not. The one divine being may be a creator but, allows us free will. So, living your dreams are possible for us all if only we believe.
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very good writing here. You have touched upon a subject that we all could do better by exploring. I enjoyed your poem. thanks for sharing. peace and light, kp
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Okay, this poem is replacing my last favorite
poem by you. I love the thoughts this stirred
(even at this ungodly hour) and you are so right...
"Very few of the chosen realize they have it.."
Prolific work, my sweetie....Lane
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I love this. The truth is that everything outside of this moment is either a memory, a form of dream, or imaginary, another form of dream. The only thing with true value, true reality, is this moment. You have demonstrated this well. What everyone truly seeks, know "it" or not, is to be fully in the moment. That opportunity is always there, and anyone can take advantage of it anytime. Three bunnies for a wonderful philosophical write!!!
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Amera,
everything you ever knew is a fabrication of your own creation. The universe 'is' Chaos, and to effect order from Chaos requires the introduction of disorder, yes, disorder, not order. for it is your and mine and everyones visualizations that weave the loom of the chaos into a semblence of order, creating what we agree to call 'reality'. In truth we are nothing but a bunch of charged oscillations maintaining our recognized physical form... charged votexes spining and cooperating below the planck scale to be 'us' to be everything..as 'we' visualize it to be. odd that in order for us to exist at all, we truly have to 'want' to exist.
Dad
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