There’s something there
Beneath the glare
Behind the black mascara
Underneath the car hood
There lies a heart
A fucked up heart
Someone who needs to be loved
Love me for who I am
Love me love me
Scream out my name
Don’t judge me on my past mistakes
Please don’t push me away
Magic kisses
Sweet romance
A girl with secrets
A twisted past
I am as dark as night
I am as cold as ice
I am on the edge of my life
Save me from my insanity
I pray to god for forgiveness
I prayed for you tonight
A love so deep
A love so real
Make me feel like I can believe
Kissing you would be so sweet
Underneath the stars so bright
Loving you in the afternoon
When raindrops drenched my lips
I steal away a mornings kiss
Yeah this is what my love would be like
There’s something there
Between us two
I call it sparks
Do you feel it too?
Make me fall in love with you
Author notes
Im 16.............I was inspired to write this poem by all the bad relationships i have been in! This is for the one boy who really loved me and i let him get away.Enjoy
**Bloved**
A contest entry
- Needing To Be Loved by shysky.
450 points, ended April 21, 2007, 32 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - love poems (13yrs-18yrs) by Shacadia Shay.
390 points, ended May 3, 2007, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Poem(s) You Have Ever Wrote by NickelleteXninja.
550 points, ended June 15, 2007, 140 entries
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Comments
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Sweet :)
well written
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One piece that's true to the heart...
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You should win more
This poem is hardcore-great descriptions..showered with creativity and your lovely imagination...this poem is JUST written so remarkably..wow..thanks for stopping by my page..this poem is soooo ....i am speechless for the last word...
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thanks so much for reading...this is one of my favorite poems from myself... because it doesnt seem so forced...like most "love" poems...I just wanted the reader to actually see and feel what im going thru
and im glad i check ur page out.....it was awesomeness
[thanks for reading]
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Masterful!!!!! So thought provoking!!!!!!! It brought back some memories of time gone by!!!!! This is a beautiful write and excellent delivery of message!!!!!!!!
You are so gifted for one so young!!!!
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Thank you so much for reading!
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Grand
I liked this
becasue I could relate
that loving to be loved and wanting to be loved love
....lol
is the story of my life
awesome write
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Kissing you would be so sweet
Underneath the stars so bright
Loving you in the afternoon
When raindrops drenched my lips
I steal away a mornings kiss
Yeah this is what my love would be like
I absolutely love this stanza ... so much emotion ... and so much love ... you really put yourself out there in this one ... amazingly written and wonderfully put out ... very well done ... keep writing and keep smiling
Sparkeh -
'Magic kisses
Sweet romance
A girl with secrets
A twisted past'
well i was going to say brilliant to this stanza but as I read on my bloved friend I realized that it was all sheer brilliance.
I love this stanza as well
'Kissing you would be so sweet
Underneath the stars so bright
Loving you in the afternoon
When raindrops drenched my lips
I steal away a mornings kiss
Yeah this is what my love would be like'
this makes me think of the last time i kissed my fiance haha so it was beauty to me
Thank you so much! its been so long since i've ventured into that time in my life....
kudos to you
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thanks Im glad you liked it!
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I like this piece and the fact you're 16 shows that you've got some great talent. I love the way you start with a darkish feel to the poem and you grow it to this love poem that holds a lot of emotions inside. This is a good piece, you've got talent
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Thank you so much for your comment. I really do love poetry and I hope that my work can get better. Thank you so much
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Wow this is really good! This should have won 2 silvers!! Anyway the entire thng was great, but my fav is I am as dark as night
I am as cold as ice
I am on the edge of my life
Save me from my insanity
Its just cause its good ^_^
Great write!!
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thanks
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This is really good!!!
I really liked this .... over all... I can't think of anything I'd say is wrong with it... -
this is truly a lovely poem, i lyk how its written & the way you've expressed yourself. best of luck in your love life & in my contest.
--Blessed be--
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Damn girl.... this is an amazing write. I love the desperation feeling I get from this, it's screaming out for acceptance. Very deep and raw emotions. I think you've done an excellent job with this.
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WOW! That was incredible! Exactly the type of longing and need and desire I was looking for. Intense in emotion and utterly fantastic.
Thank you for entering my contest
I loved the read
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this is a great love poem! i really like the different phrases that you used, and the different images that you created by the use of words. i really like how you built up the poem until the end where you summed up everything in 7 words, "Make me fall in love with you
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this is so cute
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