Frightening thoughts of the future
Can make one think of cashing in their chips
Darkness, at times clouds their vision
As the body comes to a laborious halt
Such is the need to embrace the other
That soul that has lingered in the background
Of those younger wonderful years
Somewhat like that teenage girl
You never notice until womanhood
Strange how we can change
As age withers away at us
Resolute though we can be
We cannot overcome fate
And as I wonder and wait
Thinking of this life
How fast it has moved
I comfort myself with the knowledge
That I am a free thinker
Not unafraid
But always with hope for another chance
A spirit free of pain
A light encapsulated by love
My mellow domain
Where I'll bathe in a beautiful warmth
My wish for all
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- The Answer... by poeticcaresses.
610 points, ended December 2, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Die gedanken sind frei, wer kann sie eratten?
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This is so strong. It offers hope too. Very good indeed Bob. The third stanza is my personal favourite - it made me look at myself - loved these lines:
Somewhat like that teenage girl
You never notice until womanhood
Will read more, that's a promise. xx Deb
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Hope is there at the end. Hope is eternal, even in situations where survival is not assured. You do write very good poetry my friend and it all helps to give me a better understanding of the world in which I live. We are so different yet have so much in common, even with a very large ocean between us.
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Absoutely Wonderful!
This, my friend, was another amazing write. I love how your poem flows. It moves as does a stream, with beauty and grace.
"Strange how we can change
As age withers away at us
Resolute though we can be
We cannot overcome fate"
This has to be my favorate verse. It stands true and I Believe that you should have gotten higher in this contest. Lovely write. Absoutely Brillant! Cudos
~Shadow-Alchemist
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Congrats on the trophy... a well deserved one...and the write is simply awesome...
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thank you for your lovely poem, love Kiarna
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good luck in contest bob. You penned an excellent write here, as long as you keep being a free thinker
you shall be free from all that you fear.
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Beautiful poem. I think you wrote this very well, and it has a nice, easy flow to it. It sounds very thoughtful and contemplative, and I like it a lot.
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Beautiful piece of work. This really paints a picture of life's journey and how we face it. I want to say more but this one has my mind turning so that I'm rather lost for words. Excellent write. Thank you for entering!
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Truly words of wisdom that speaks volumes from one's heart...simple nuggets we all should value yet often times forget along the journey...
Lines that struck a chord:
Strange how we can change
As age withers away at us
A light encapsulated by love
Well done!...Good luck in the contest
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Inspiring work.
True Genius. From the heart.
I have smiled today, to see another poet as passionate as I. -
Dear Bob, thank you for sharing this very heartfelt poem of yours, this I could fully relate too and those words "A spirit free of pain" I absolutely love, very emotional for me this one but so very true, brilliant write my friend...
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Beautifully written, very spiritual but also sensual too. A bit like a soothing hug for the soul. Excellent piece
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I can relate to this poem well, especially the third stanza, it really reflected my thoughts of late, thankyou for that.
'Somewhat like that teenage girl
you never notice until womanhood'
only that teenage girl was my other Self.
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we all have hopes and dreams, but rarely succeed but still walk past what we can't have, hope for the future always...
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Hi gal
So true and again ty for all your kind comments
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I like the hopeful feel of this- how contentment finds us when we quit working so hard for it... I like to think of getting older as getting free-er- though my body may disagree!
I find it amusing that my markers for "old" keep changing- I remember thinking 29 was old- now that I'm pushing 40- even 50 doesn't seem all THAT old.
Wonderful poem Bob- on a lot of levels.
Keep them coming- a girl finds a fair amount of delight in your words.
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You are a free thinker.
I too feel that I am a free thinker and many of the lines do hit a spot in me that agrees with the entire piece. Not unafraid. But always with hope for another chance, a spirit free of pain. Each paragraph is excellent to read. -
I Stand Amazed
Life in all it's glory, whether it be happy or sad tis a part of us. The things that we go through in life only help us to become better 'n stronger people. This is a wonderful wish that you have for others as well as yourself. I can not tell you how much this has touched me 'n given me hope for tomorrow.
To you, I say thank you...thank you for sharing your heart with poets such as myself. Please do keep writing, tis always a pleasure 'n a joy!
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Tis a wonderful feeling your words have given.I really like this freewrite splendidly done indeed.Thanks for sharing your poem with us all.BRAVO!!!
Tony
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now this is the rosiest of outlooks and i hope your dreams will one day be answered as you wish...how pleasant!
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nice...lovely language...another good one.
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thank you
You are very kind . thanks so much
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What a huge heart and open mind you have. ~WOW~ I can't pick a line I like best as they all seem to jump at me and easy to relate to the feelings you've expressed. your words are words are warm and tender. such and amazing write in which we can all relate to. My dear friend SWEET MUSINGS asked me to look at your work. I'm glad she did.
simply stunning!
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Beautiful
The title of your poem is very interesting! I honestly believe we all have "Thoughts, Hopes And Wishes" little do we realise they are realised for the most part in our everyday lives... just the thought we are free to think our beautiful thoughts, are able to go anywhere we wish in our mind, even if that is by "bathing in beautiful warmth, then I am sure your "thoughts, hopes and wishes" are with you throughout your day.
I truly did enjoy reading this, it is so very simple yet it has so much meaning threaded througout each and every line.
Thank you for the opportunity of being able to share this.
~Katie~
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"Strange how we can change as age withers away at us"I LOVE THE WORD "withers" STRANGE THAT CERTAIN WORDS POP OUT AT ME. LOL. THIS IS VERY WELL DONE FLOWED EASILY MY FAVORITE LINE IS "Not unafraid But always with hope for another chance A spirit free of pain A light encapsulated by love" BEAUTIFUL ARRANGEMENT OF WORDS .
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A wonderful piece my friendWhere i'll bath in a beautiful warmth My wish for allTo be a free thinker is this dat and time is a wonderful thing that makes you special for so many can not do that, they must be lead
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Very Good
Not unafraid
But always with hope for another chance
A spirit free of pain
A light encapsulated by love
My mellow domain
Where I'll bath in a beautiful warmth
My wish for all
I really love the ending it made me smile. I like it very much we may age. There is so much to life. Being a free thinker means we can make choices to enrich our life and make this earth a better place. Our hope we will pass it to the next generation. Who will hopefully do it better then we did.
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We are never too old to be given another chance.when we are we need to grasp it with both hands and live every moment.We cannot change what has been but we can make the most of what is.an Excellent poem Bob Fox, Ros
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thank you
Thanks for taking the time to read my poem. It is much appreciated
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his life can be all it needs to be if more cared like you, just to think before acting and make the right choices among the chaos. Nice write.
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Honestly..I love it..so much heart..this is truly a soulful write..always a pleasure to read your work..~Pastel
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