The beast hidden in shadows and it stays emotional,
A secret pact to condemn its self to a life of painful scarring,
It cannot break away from the subconscious it’s rooted to,
It walks farther out in to the midnight sun singing of it’s soon betrayal,
This narrator will soon discover the darling face under the monster's masque,
I will not lie its freighting to be in such presence of a grotesques monster that is me.
Alas! I let this treaty of tragedy slip away from my dead grip,
I let my mind a ‘drift to tales of my down fall passed down my the village elder,
Lies that have filled my head that permanently leaves a stench of bile on my tongue,
It sends my weak core into convulsions as I try to rid it of my throat,
The dark paranoia wins and I lay defeated once more and surrender to my destruction,
The towers, the walls I've built up to protect me of the on coming flood crash down,
And, in rubble I crouch looking for the broken pieces of my sanity,
It is lost forever in a abyss of angst and it stains my very thoughts,
Pulverizing what sanity I may still possess I crumble with those towers,
Sending a dark cloud to block my eyes and to shade my emotions,
Good fellows! The monster is no more as is the creature staring at you writing epitaph,
My destruction is a story inscribed on my grave.
Are you brave enough to listen to those hollowed sounds?
A contest entry
- P.A.I.N. by PoEtS-bLeEd-InK.
375 points, ended April 15, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For those with four or less by Lactar Wolfgang.
375 points, ended April 9, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DEEP, DARK, EMOTIONAL, ANYTHING! by Heavens Child.
425 points, ended April 10, 2007, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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powerful full of emotion. Nice imagrey. A bit hard to read I agee with poets-bleed-ink on that. I did like it a good poem.
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this is sorta hard to read because of the lines being so long and not knowing where to pause and find the key points in the poem ... does that make sense?
but the poem istelf is powerful, emotional and sad ... I think it was a good write for the contest ... but if you think of a different way to show pauses and such, it would be even more powerful ... the poem wouldn't be amazing, it would become spectacular!!!
good luck in the judging process
InKy
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