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In Blue

And we ran on through the fog
Tripped over that log
Our hands met in this
And my walls came crashing down

I wanted to have your back
To cover
Take all your flak
We suffered from a lack
Of something critical

But the truth, my love, is this
I did not deserve your kiss
I loved you through a mist
We've fallen
Like the family crest

But little did you know
As your tears fell and flowed
Somone came tonight
To cause you a great fright

I don't think you knew
What someone did for you
I don't think you knew
That He had covered you
In Blue

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  • SorrowWithoutWords
    April 8, 2007

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    Intensely written...its very chaotic and a whilrwind in my head...its like theres a couple runnin and runnin from something with their love and movin so fast that they lose each other. well done i like the consistancy of the triplet rhymes within your stanzas. the ending however could've been a little clearer to me. good work though!
    ~Sorrow~
    PS thanks for your comment on my poem An Affair With The Devil