Failing myself,
In that I cannot be described
By one mere word.
R-E-D
Retrieving something from the dark and
Emptying my heart out to
Destroy a hidden longing.
The bloody lust is mistaken for
A picture of the truth.
Not what I long for,
But what I have become.
Passion,
It drives some;
But not me.
No…not me.
I am only the outside,
The skin of this obsession.
Madness…it haunts you;
Yet, if this is what is happening to you,
Think of what it does to me.
The rose,
My very epitome;
The color seeping through souls.
Love inspired.
Granting hope to the hopeless;
Love to the loveless;
Dark, deep-colored rose.
But have you forgotten?
Roses have thorns.
Thorns,
Piercing you with a single touch,
Revealing tiny droplets of blood;
Now what are you thinking?
Suddenly the color loses its lust.
Drop the rose,
The moment has passed.
My friend,
What did you expect?
I am deeper than language can delve.
I engrave my mark into your heart,
I reside in your bloodshot eyes.
I give you your passions and desires,
I offer you love in a million ways.
I cause you to suffer in pain.
And I continue to say,
“Color me red”
Author notes
OPTION 2 - a color
red is my favorite color. and this describes why, in a different sort of way.
A contest entry
- *~-* The Passion of Red *-~* by Dragonsblood.
450 points, ended April 18, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The one and only idol round 2 (INVITE ONLY) by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
900 points, ended June 7, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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the poem made the colour come alive and it made me think about the colour red and how it is always attached as being an evil and bad colour and you described this well throughout the poem. the poem seemed to have sense and truth throughout it aswell and it was heartfelt and dark.
you really made the colour come alive
thnx for a wonderful write could you please send me your username and poem entred in last round thnx -
The poem was able to emanate the presumptions, POV's, belief about the color red. This poems magnificently created a well describe depiction or the essence of the color red.
My favorite lines:
I am deeper than language can delve.
I engrave my mark into your heart,
I reside in your bloodshot eyes.
I give you your passions and desires,
I offer you love in a million ways.
I cause you to suffer in pain.
A breath taking reality in concluding your poem.
Thanks for sharing and see you around.
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i read this poem like every other day...this is your masterpeice.
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aw thanks! you're awesome. and thank you too for letting me knwo that!!!!!
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well done!
I first read the beginning of this poem and thought "gosh is this a vain person maybe a bit vengeful too..." and as I read the piece my eyes were opened and continued to raise my brows. "But have you forgotten? roses have thorns..." wow. relate that to life and you see how every passion of lust can hold its thorn and every sweet kiss of love isnt always a honeymoon night. "I am deeper than language can delve.
I engrave my mark into your heart, And I continue to say, Color me Red." Deeper than language, engraved gashing mark upon your heart yet I continue I continue to say.. color me red. Delicious wording and so truthful and wonderful. This piece delights me in its switch of emotion and full flooded feeling of red for you must know. not every red tastes bitter or sweet.
Well Done.
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I am deeper than language can delve.
I engrave my mark into your heart,
I reside in your bloodshot eyes.
I give you your passions and desires,
I offer you love in a million ways.
I cause you to suffer in pain.
And I continue to say,
“Color me red”
Loved it! good luck with the contest. peace and light, kp -
Very good
Very good and deep. My faveorite part was:
I am deeper than language can delve.
I engrave my mark into your heart,
I reside in your bloodshot eyes.
I give you your passions and desires,
I offer you love in a million ways.
I cause you to suffer in pain.
That was dark and edgey!! Good job and best of luck in your writing future!!
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little red writing hood!
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nice
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another comment
ok.. sorry...
so.. i agree with brian.. this is probably the best thing youve written.. or just so powerful that it completely blocks everything else out of my mind.. I cant say in words how this poem makes me feel... so much passion in every word you have here.. and the intensity!!!! incredible.. ... im basically speechless.. tho i am trying to say something intelligent.. but failing... this is just too powerful... i think im going to read this a million times... ...
drop a rose, the moment is passed ... and the second to last stanza!!! .. wow... and then the finish...
k.. im just raving... bye
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wow. wow again. what happened to the pre-allpoetry kristin that was so happy?!?! just kidding!! wow, that was, like everyone else said, passionate. i like the deepth of it. it was really emotion filled. good job, as always!!
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she up and moved far, far away
lol! thanks a lot!!!
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Interesting. It goes very deep and doesn't just describe the surface. It is like you give red something deeper. It isn't just a color any more, its....something more than a color, you don't seem to give it a personality, at least to me, but you make it more than it is. I'm having problems describing this. It's like to most it's just a color, but to you it's something more personal. Lol, like that made any sense, but that's what I got out of it.
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sure it makes sense...i would have problems describing it too
but since i wrote it, i'll explain, it's kind of like describing ME as the color red...ok, maybe that makes it more confusing. don't listen to me! thanks for the wonderful comment though!
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Amazing
A brilliant write on the color red. You should win the contest hands down. Keep on writing my friend, for this poem itself is a "sonnet" on writing as it should be.
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Wow this is pretty incredible. there's a lot of truth to it and the little twists in it make it compelling to read. niice job.
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wow
i love it.
Red is my nickname.
this is crimson perfection, my dear...
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This is a wonderful very vivid image of what this color represents to you. Well done my friend ... this was an excellent and very creative write!
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this is AMAZING! wow...you've created your masterpiece.
THIS IS CRAZY!!! I think this is probobly the most POWERFUL peice of writing you've ever produced...something about it just makes me passionately love it!! You really did an outstanding, awesome, and yes, perfect, job using that color to put all that emotion in there...so provocatively enchanting...i can't even think about it without being completely consumed in it! The way you began it was really cool and the ending was even more perfect! Everything in the middle? BRILLIANT!!!!!!! You don't know how brilliant this is...i just can't get over the emotional power this has...that second to last paragraph!!!!! WOW, the repitition, wordchoice and images you used were so deeply amazing...I LOVED IT as much as it is humanely possible to love a poem...I'm going to spend the rest of my life reading this, again, and again, and again, and again...w o w
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Incredibly & Powerfully Red
wow...this left me speechless. I don't know if you did this on purpose, but I noticed that the second stanza is an acrostic RED. very cool, or should I say hot? The personification is utterly amazing. For the color red to have inspired this writing is absolutley incredible. Excellent. Excellent. Excellent!
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ah, you noticed it! yes, i did purposefully make it an acrostic. it was really only for personaly satisfaction of course, but hey...if you notice it, it makes it cooler (or hotter, as you put it!) to read! thank you!
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oOo
very nice! such a great poem about such a simple subject. beautiful job! =)
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Great
I like this =] Keep up the good work
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Certainly vivid - filled with many visuals dealing with the color read. Passionate about this color, one can see in the words you write and how you write them - good flow and passion galore in these lines.
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oh, wow..this is great...it tends to be pretty difficult to personify something like a color without sounding obvious or silly, but this was definatly niether...
I love this verse: " am deeper than language can delve.
I engrave my mark into your heart,
I reside in your bloodshot eyes.
I give you your passions and desires,
I offer you love in a million ways.
I cause you to suffer in pain.".. and this image here "Thorns,
Piercing you with a single touch,
Revealing tiny droplets of blood;
Now what are you thinking?
Suddenly the color loses its lust.
Drop the rose,
The moment has passed." is very clear...
good luck!
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