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daytime murder

i walk up the stairs
searching for my life
i lift his unsteady head
and pull back on that fucking knife

tears stream my face
as he wails and crys in pain
he grabs my arm so tight
and screams my horrid name

"it's okay i sware
i'm trying to help you so
don't leave me Kyle
please, don't ever let go"

the words echo into the house
now filled with light and blood
i wipe away the tears
that thicken up like mud

lying in my arms
is the body of a dead one
the love i used to kiss
he's breathing's almost done

i lift his head up higher
blood spilling from his mouth
i gently kiss his face
hoping his death's a doubt

"i love you oh so much
that no one else can see
how much i wish that person
would die in place of thee!"

my hubby's lungs collapse
and his eyes start to close
"i love you" he says
as if i'd always known

"i love you don't leave
i'll try to get some help -
there's nothing you can do
it's already been delt"

the words resounding in my head
the throbbing so dense and shrewd
i grab the knife that was inside his back
shoved there oh so crude

"this is for truth
and for the love i share
i'm coming hubby, with you
together we'll go i sware!"

i force the knife through my chest
something splits and slides
i feel the heart stop pounding
and everything implodes inside

together they fall to rest
they're joined now sweet as one
they died for each other at the same hour
and with this, it is done.

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  • MoonHaze
    May 24, 2007

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    I like this one. It's very touching and emotional. I'm gonna have to read Kyle's now too. I think you did a great job with this one. It's now my favorite by you.


  • on-bloody-heels
    May 17, 2007

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    Wow this is really good. You have strong imagery and you really have a way with words. I like it, keep up the good work.


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    April 13, 2007
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    Wow

    This is so full of emotion, love this one. Kudos!


  • ItalianPride09
    April 9, 2007

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    wow

    This poem is heart breaking i love it though it so beautiful!!! I'm feeling sad though a unbelievable sad though!!! Great Poem!!!

    Alesha

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