Happiness softly erased the sad from the night
As two hearts merged with joy then descend in flight
Cascading into abyss of emotions
A wonder was born
Heart to heart
Drifting
Upon loves winged unicorn~
Essence of tender wings, founded an isolated paradise
Where bliss flows like a river
Heaven was so precise
Love blossom as elysian fields of wildflowers
A garden of Eden
Animated by joys effervescing powers~
Meantime rain of angry storms poured down upon paradise
The demise of love was brutal, an exorbitant price
Loves tender wildflowers slowly disfigured and thorned
The loving creature evolved with two hearts viciously horned~
The memory reaches to capture the splendor that was born
Always to be lured in the pain
Garden of thorns
Only joyful wings of the heart can enter into loves paradise
And then precious with profound tender loving emotions
True love
Within its awesome wonder
As it is softly born~
Author notes
Written July 12th, 2003
Pic done by Josephine Wall
In a list
A contest entry
- Your Best Pre-Written Rhyme by poets whisper.
800 points, ended November 11, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is very magical and beautiful, Complex and deep.
I enjoyed reading this. Though I wish there was more reference to the unicorn.
Thank you for entering it in my contest. I love the image you have used, I believe it is by Josephine Wall. If it is so, I think you ought to credit her in your author's notes.
Keep on writing and good luck.
Nooni
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unicorns alway
makes beautiful poems and you sure pulled it off as well, lovely detailed piece here sis, thank you for sharing
good luck
Linda
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Great write. I really enjoyed your rich imagery. I also like the graphic you chose to represent your writing. Good job and thank you for entering
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Lovely poem, Sis!
You wrote this awesome poem on my birthday five years ago. Time flies..like the magnificent unicorn you write about so well! I especially love the first line.."Happiness softly erased the sad from the night". Beautiful pic' of the unicorn..it seems like you actually traveled to another world where unicorns exist and brought back the beauty from that other world.
Best of Luck in this contest, Sis!
I think you deserve more than an honorable mention for this fantastic poem!
Much Love!
Maureen
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No matter what subject your poem is about, youpour your heart into the words and create magic. I loved this. Good luck in the contests.
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From start to finish every word of this poem is stunning. It actually put a smile on my face. You have captured and expressed the beauty of the unicorn so well in this. The picture is also very beautiful. I love this poem which is helped even more seeing as I'm a huge sucker for unicorns and have been collecting everything unicorn from statues, paintings, stuffed animals, etc. my entire life.
All my love,
~Amanda~
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a beautiful poem you have captured a enchanting journey with mystery and magic your imagery is wonderful and your emotions enthrouling good luck inthe contestmaralisa
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Another journey well penned indeed and so worthy the HM. I really do like this line ...."Cascading into abyss of emotions". Hats off to your talent.
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excellent
What a thrill to read a second time. So well expressed. Best of luck in the contest. -
an awesome piece you have penned here, complimented by the picture.
Thank you for sharing.
Juls
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It is difficult to capture the elusive beauty of the unicorn--the image recreates it visually, and the poem re-works that image into words. Nicely done.
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This is very good. You wrote this poem the day I turned 13... lol. nice. You are a finalist! I love thie peice! it kept my attention very well! and you did a great job with creativity! I lvoe it! Keep it uP! Thanks for your entry and best of luck!
Crimson -
Truely beautiful
The imagery and creativity in this leaps and grabs the reader. What a artist of words you are.
Best of luck in the contest.
Delila
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Wonderful
What creative and well written poem. Best of luck in the contest.
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The memory reaches to capture the splendor that was born
Always to be lured in the pain
Garden of thorns
Only joyful wings of the heart can enter into loves paradise
And then precious with profound tender loving emotions
True love
Within its awesome wonder
As it is softly born~
This part of the poem started my brain to work. My life seems to be born of pain. I have had plenty of thorns in life. Some day I will get joy filled wings. I love it so very much. You inspire to work harder on my poems. I feel they are lacking something. This a pure lovely write. I can not sleep due to the pain. Love it!!
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So purely beautiful and enchanting... surrounds the reader in such fantastic imagery. What an adventure into beauty!
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Very nicely done, Sis!
Profound story you tell in this fantastic fantasy!
Best of Luck in this contest!
Love Ya!
Maureen
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Absolutely beautiful, definitely what I'm looking for in this contest. Great use of vocabulary, I particularly liked the 'elysian fields' reference. Good luck in the contest, and thanks very much for entering. ^_^
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Susan
stunning, and you used the same picture as I did! This is fantasy at it's best, your talent shines in this, so vivid in the imagination, exquisitely written...could feel all the emotion during the storm and what beauty in the end. Excellent in every way! The best! Ann 
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Exquisite
Oh, this is so beautiful, Susan! And, as you know, I simply adore Unicorns: those magnificent creatures of the Old Testament. And, you even managed to put a Unicorn pic with this delightful read that I actually do not have. Hope you don't mind if I steal it. LOL!
You talent shines exquisitely with this piece that so reminds me of God's love amidst a chaotic world filled with hate. Only through Him is true love found and can be born within us. Excellent, dear one!
Good luck in the contest! Love and hugs, Bon
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Fantastic fantasy, Sis! I have two unicorn figurines and love how beautiful and majestic they are. Loved the pic'! Good Luck in the contest!
Love Ya!
<3 Maureen
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'Essence of tender wings, founded an isolated paradise
Where bliss flows like a river
Heaven was so precise
Love blossom as elysian fields of wildflowers
A garden of Eden
Animated by joys effervescing powers~'
Wow, Susan...this is a real beauty!!! Very well done...an awesome poem & a beautiful picture, too...eh, you're gonna win, hands~down!!! Good'un, Sis...
Wanda
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very sweet and lovely.Great work.Nice flow and as usual fantastic write.Blessed be
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I am constently amazed at the power of your words. I don't know why because they are classical Susan. You always set the rhyme and flow just right. Then as icing on the cake your pictures and backgrounds are just perfect. Truly a wonderous poem Susan.
Hugs,
Susan -
I definitely had to see what this poem was about since I just wrote a poem called Unicorn. I was completely amazed and not let down at all. I am very impressed how you seem to come up with a great picture to go with such moving words.
Jim aka ThePoetAmuse -
OK..... I don't know what I could say that could top what everyone else has said.... Unicorns have been a favorite of mine since before I could remember..... I've written a few unicorn poems and couldn't quite captured the words the beautiful beast deserves.. You've done it wonderfully!
And you made another unicorn lover extremely pleased... Thank you!
Quick question - is that picture "shareable" If I saved a copy of it, I wouldn't use it on this site, just keep it for my own personal desktop use. I enjoy unicorn pictures and I haven't seen one quite as beautiful as this... It does suit your poem perfectly! Either way - lovely work! -
Wow that was amazing, I felt enchanted and enlightened by your choice of words.
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Incredible stuff this...I love it...great images....You are the best Susan, honestly, your poems never fail to inspire me...keep it up...HUGE hugs and love, Rowan
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OHHH My Susan!!!!! Your poem brings out such a beautiful story in the picture!!!! It's like it was painted just for your poem!!!!
Truely a magnificent work here!!!!!
You have really out done yourself!!!! 
~Laura
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Simply Beautiful!
Well, this one definately took my breath away for a moment. I read the words, stared at the pic, closed my eyes, saw two souls, entwined as one, carresing gently, enjoying one another, then...the beast emerged...boy I could go on and on. What inspiration! Lovely...just lovely! Skipper -
You sure didn't need the photo to accompany this write, as your words painted a truly magnificent picture of their own...a beautifully descriptive write Susan!!! Love can surely take one to such magical places...a most beautiful write!!!
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Softly , gently and such emotion ....these words can transport one to a place where one wants to be forever , and yet the sadness also seems a bit prevalent. But you do have a wonderful way with magical words ....or are the words ordinary and YOU make them magical?:) always
Reenie
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I love the poem, it sends me into a world of fantasy. The visualization is beautiful. Very well done.
~Anika, The Gothic Blood Rose -
What love annoints this hearts delight?
To blossom in the dead of night.
Came I a stranger to paradise,
In hopes that dreaming will suffice,
To seal the gentle joy I feel,
That all my dreams be somehow real. excellant as usual Susan. HUGS and roses want more? (I got a million of em. LOL)
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Oh susan, this is so beautiful. It flowed so nicely and your choice of words were exactly right. I loved this Sis!!
Lynn -
Your words are gentle with a wide range of vocabulary, and the picture is a perfect match for the colorful description in this soft write. Well done and thank you for reading my work.
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Again, my Kentucky cousin..
You have created a most beautiful piece..and that pic..i'd love to have that framed for my daughter's room...lol..it is gorgeous!
Your talent is awesome..
Thank you for sharing it with us all
Love ya
~Pamela -
More than beautiful...
This poem is beautiful and so much more.. It's very gentle and wonderful that I as the role of the reader enjoy it so much that I've liked it a lot. I love unicorns and their serene calmness to nature and maybe just maybe a bit of magic as well.. The picture and the background is just the perfect touch to make this poem come alive. Like I said before, I've enjoyed my stay. Please do keep writing for you have a way with words that takes imagination to the next level.
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I dunno how you always do this Susan but you do and it is always so beautiful
Your picture~~these words~~the rhyme!! The way it started out so loving and ended so sadly all of the sudden that was awesome
This must be my new fav of yours just beautiful this was
~~Dawn
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Absolutely beautiful, Susan. The pic and poem were born for each other...I love it
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Excellent Piece
Simply amazing dear Susan, thanks for sharing this beautiful piece!
Your imagery is so wonderful, and this was so enjoyable to read!
Every write I read of yours is always truly Excellent! ~Smiles~
-Timothy -
Susan this is really just serenity on a page. Amazing piece dear. You always write the most wonderfully beautiful pieces. Makes me smile
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exceptional
Simply wonderful -
Susan
Oh my, this is beyond beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Your whispered words breath sweet life into the gorgeous picture
Love you,
Karen
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awesome as usual, susan!
i love your imagery and all!
awesome picture you've put in here, i just can't say enough about this one!
blessed be
mike -
Beautiful write. Just lovely.
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OMG... Susan... this is amazingly beautiful. Your imagery and soft style always amazes me. I don't think there is anything you could not write about and make it completely visual for the reader. Love the way you wrap this one up.
True love
Within its awesome wonder
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Beautiful as always.You never cease to amaze me with your talent for words and creation of such wonderous pictures.
Great Write!
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excellent
beautiful. your words are soft and gentle to the heart. The picture was a brilliant idea. i smiled all the way through it.
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Everything you write is so tender, gentle, soft. I think your words are a lot like you sweet girl. You inspire me to be a better person my friend.
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First, praise to the time and effort in presentation, Lovely picture, sets a fire inside the imagination.
"Cascading into abyss of emotions"
I might think about phrasing here... Cascading down the abyss of emotions...maybe ? just the way I would read it...
"...creature evolved with two hearts viciously horned..." This brought such strong visuals and was a fantastic metaphor for love.
I really enjoyed reading this - thanks for the opportunity!
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Absolutely beautiful!!! Pen on...=)
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