She's got me in the backseat
and tryin' for a feel
I'm fighting for my virtue
and reachin' for the wheel
She's one hand on my gearshift
I won't get out alive
she's got me in the backseat
and shifting into drive
Her engine's really hummin'
man, hear that baby purr
she's grabbing at the throttle
and destination " Her" ( ahem)
I've never seen a Caddie
whose ride came even near
I get a little scared
she grabs another gear
(phew)
now she is really flying
she's pullin' out to pass
I'm climbing out the window
her hand upon my.....
and just as luck would have it
from nowhere comes a cop
if not for that old flat foot
she never would have stopped.
Well....( takes a breath and thinks)
Now as I look back on it
I kinda liked the swerves,
and if I had another chance...
I think I'd hug her curves.
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Awesome work here. This is comical and penned very nicely. Great rhyme scheme! Thanks so much for entering this into my contest. Best wishes.
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Too funny! I loved it, especially in rhyming verse, this is good.
Congrats on all your trophies you've won.
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YESSA!
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this was amazing i loved your emotion...sorry its taking so long to judge i have to go threw and read each persons poem...i'm going to announce the winner after i finish reading all of the poems....i loved your vocabulary...and i felt every word:] and good luck (FINALIST)
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thank you
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LOL This is an awesome poem and I loved your humor. Congrats on the wonderful cups you've won and good luck in this contest as well.
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Clever, funny and worth the gold.
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LMAO .... I so needed some humor and this certainly did it for me. What an imagination and to do it in perfect rhyme!!!
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lol loved the double meaning behind this ... a very humorous piece about the road,
hugs,
georgie and shane,
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brilliant. I really laughed out loud.
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ROFL...I just love this, you got to hold onto those curves like grim death and let it ride. Brilliant, witty and well written C
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Great write!
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cool
in the poem shouldn't the word "Caddie" (golf bag holder guy) be "Cabbie" (NYC taxi crazy gibbering driver guy) - phenomenal first two lines in first two stanzas
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In this instance Caddie means Cadillac
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Ha ha ha! Very witty, with excellent meter and rhyme ~ it so enhances the humour! Lovely job.
This is how you scored:
Laugh-o-meter: 10/10 Had me riveted!
Spelling/grammar: 10/10
Flow: 9.5/10
Rhyme (if applicable): 10/10
Total score: 39.5/40 (Awesome!)
Many thanks for taking the time to enter this contest, and best of luck!
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ok i loved this. holy hell this was funny and it kept my attention all the way thru
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Lovely write! It had me laughing and picturing some guy tryin to figure out a way out. I guess a vivid imagination helps a lot when reading poetry. Great write.
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Wow.
Awesome write and VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY metaphorical. I love this in a poem..each and every line is symbolizing something completely different. BRAVO for this. Awesome all around structure and great rhyme scheme. Thank you for your entry and good luck.
~Ray~
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haha this one made me laugh, keep writing!
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This is a very well written piece, and it is very exciteing. I loved how I was reading every line just so I could read the next, and find out what happened. It made me smile a good bit, but I don't think it struck my funny Bone quite the way that I needed it to. Thanks for sharing. Love and Peace, Charlene.
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Heheh...That sounds like my friend's ex girlfriend. Lmao. Thanks for entering, and good luck ^^
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lol
Another great one
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