Walking along the sandy shore
Along the rolling, burning tide
We talk, us cousins, in the surf
Laughing as sea-birds collide.
As cousins, we're a lively two,
Laughing and talking and crying,
We only fight about what next to do,
(And on which guys to do all the spying!)
At night, when silent, we can hear
Each other's sighing thoughts,
And when it comes to life and love,
We know what needs forgot.
As cousins dear, I help you grow
Through poetry - writing too,
Giving advice along the way
Is what we're meant to do.
Author notes
ummm well i started making this a descriptive poem but it lent itself more to be a sorta funny poem, so w.e.
gracie aka clules
A contest entry
- Looking For AP Family by WarmHeartedGeisha.
522 points, ended April 14, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I would personally add some words to the "Laughing as sea-birds collide" line because I was reading it aloud and the syllables from the first 3 lines in comparison to the 4th line didn't match closely enough as the first 3 lines did.
Besides that, I like this. Some lines were humorous, and the whole thing was very sincere and warmhearted. You must love and get along with your cousin . It sounds like a wonderful relationship. Great job dearie, cant wait to read your next poem! : -
Vivid
i love the imagery. Good write. -
hahaha ^_^ I just read this one, and its still GREAT!!
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thank you
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