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Eternal Bloom

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          Original Artwork by Renelle Sommerville (Ishtar)
                        Media: Watercolour



For now we see through a glass, darkly; but then face to face: 1 Cor. 13:12a
  

 

 

The window blurred with milky mist, the pitcher frosty too,

The leaves that limply hang outside reflect in muted blue.

And gently placed before them both, a newly opened rose,

Freshly snipped from thorny stem, and very caref’ly posed. 

 

The rose’s inside half is lit, its reds and yellows glow,

Reflected in the pitcher’s glass, an iridescent show.

The outside half is shadow draped, its colors barely seen,

Distorted by the window’s dark, translucent grays and green.

Outside the darkness seethes and roils, thank goodness for the glass.

E’en though not seen its presence forms a resolute impasse.

The rose, protected from the blast is still and unaware,

Its colours pure and radiant, a sight extrordinaire.

The chilling rain rolls down the pane with opalescent trails,

The droplets clinging to the glass like round, translucent snails.

They blur the view of what’s within, that shimmers in the light,

Juxtaposed with blues and blacks of unrelenting night.

The glo’rous beautify of the rose, fresh cut and yet alive,

Whose all-surrounding warmth and light insures it will survive,

When seen by those outside the glass may not be truly seen,

For milky mist and frosty haze are thrust up in-between.

Those wayward, world-worn, weary ones, who muddle through the night,

When welcomed by the morning and its soul-refreshing light

May pass beyond the window glass and leave the haze behind,

And understand that until now, they have been truly blind.

For there before them lies the rose, just begging to be known.

Unfolded petals interlaced, it beauty now full-blown.

This complicated prodigy which once was but a seed,

Astounds us with its elegance, a miracle indeed.

Author notes

Once again Reni has both astounded me and challenged me with her art work. As long as she keeps painting/drawing I'll keep trying to write. It's a joy to do!

And of course, a rose is often a metaphor for a person.

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  • mystic-angel
    February 21, 2008

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    One of the most stunningly beautiful poems I have ever read. Thanks for your entry. Good luck in the contest.


  • Ellis gold member
    December 6, 2007
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    Very beautiful, indeed


  • Dragon-Tearz13
    June 28, 2007

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    This is a very beautiful poem. I love roses so I relate to this poem very much. I'm really beginning to think I also need an artist to inspire me lol. Very Nice work!!


  • catz Moderators member
    April 21, 2007

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    Oh, my, Paul, this is one of the most beautiful poems I've ever read!! All of this, inspired by Reni's painting. The painting done in watercolor (my most favorite media) is so pretty, brilliantly beautiful and your indepth poem does it more than plain justice. Your words take the fragile beauty of that rose as seen through the rain on the window glass and turns it into the most elegant of poetry.

    Magnificent, Paul, very beautiful.


    Dee


  • snipple
    April 17, 2007

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    This is a wonderfully written poem, and I applaud thee ever so much! Thank you for gracing us with such amazing words as these. I thank thee, I thank thee. Adieu, adieu, adieu.


  • Mrs.Snowflake
    April 9, 2007

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    SIMPLY AMAZING...

    SPEECHLESS...You have a talent, something, something that really is Simply Amazing. Ever since we've started to talk I've enjoyed your writing, and your insight on mine. Time goes by sometimes and I don't get to read a while and then I come on here and read one of your new poems; because you've always got a new one; and I'm so encouraged by your writing, and the meaning behind what goes with it, but most of all...the way you say things, and make them flow, make them make sense in a whole new way, and the outlook to anyone would change to this wonderfull, yet inspiring and honest view to the subject, or metaphor you seem to explain. Thank you so much, the poem is simply wonderfull, so real, and so encouraging! Your write's are always what I look forward too!
    See ya later Sir'
    The Lil One (!!LOVE YA!!)


  • Veronica Leigh
    April 7, 2007

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    wow.. I really don't even know what to say to this one. I think this is the most beautiful and deep and incredible poem I have ever read in my life. Seriously, I am speechless on this one Grandpa Paul. I honestly don't know how you do it.


  • SuZyCuE
    April 5, 2007

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    Both the art work and the poem were simply beautiful. Your imagery is outstanding as always. I love the metaphor it sure does give us another look at ourselves and others. Great lesson there
    Suzanne


  • neurosine gold member
    April 5, 2007
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    It's like you're some radical Harvard graduate. I think there was something missing inside of the fifth stanza. Or maybe you broke pattern. Overall I think it's a lovely poem from a talented writer. Maybe too technical to be art in some crazy circles. But a really great write overall.


  • rite
    April 5, 2007

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    This is brilliant poetry containing a clear message. The distorted views we have while trying to look through the glass believing we see the Rose of Sharon and believe we see what exists. But I believe our competency is inept, incapable of doing justice to the rose. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,

    U

  • Bob 42 silver member
    April 5, 2007
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    A grammar point

    The glorious beauty of the Rose, or perhaps a typo.
    Otherwise, perfection


  • Nature Song silver member
    April 5, 2007

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    Impressive, left me utterly speechless. Great collab you two should be proud of this. The pic is inspring as well. Flowed as if written by one hand. ~Sie


  • Ishtar
    April 5, 2007

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    I'm always blown away by how at ease and how clear your words are.
    You have a flow that's so silky smooth, it never lets the reader stumble or choke!

    This is fun.
    Like I said: We make a great team!


    -Reni


    • kirbysman Moderators member
      April 5, 2007
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      And back to you . . .

      I'm amazed at talent that can produce such wonderful artwork, for I can barely draw recognizable stick figures. If we can complement each other's talents, I'm overjoyed to keep doing it. Of course, the real challenge would be for you to write something about my artwork ... or even determine what it was. Thanks for the comment, the picture, and the chance to collaborate. It's great!


      Paul

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