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Goodbye

A day I hoped would never come
As I break a Federal Law.
But overwhelmed and overflowed
I let go my emotions, all raw.
I try to make you understand
Without damaging your soul
Though I know that I cannot
Leave you as you were whole.
I remember every moment
Shared in loving bliss
And those memories will fade,
Only to be missed.
I know you want to help,
But you cannot save everyone.
The weight of all my problems
Will weigh you down a ton.
Can't you feel it yet?
The weights lifted and gone?
Breathe new breath and feel around
This feeling isn't wrong.
Go and walk the path you're meant
Be who you're meant to be.
You just have to realize that
You're going to do it without me.

Goodbye Love

-Nick

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In my reflection I see a monster, no matter what road I take. I try to fix all I've done wrong, but someone always gets hurt. From now on, it won't be you.

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  • xxteardropsofjoyxx
    September 5, 2008

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    Nick

    I see you understand differently but remember some people do care about you just try to stay out of jail and its been awhile since I talked to you now I have a pic of me you will see and that is how I look ok

  • dillpickle62
    August 10, 2008

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    No Nick

    Your no monster. But you are a master with the pen. Sometimes things just work out the way they do because it is out of our hands. Even I at my age still say the wrong things or the wrong way then what I mean. Poetry helps us guys to straighten out our own heads sometimes. With your gift you will do well. Good luck and best wishes. Oh! PS try and stay out of jail. Federal Pens are no fun. According to a couple of ol'pals of mine.


  • SaMmYBabY
    May 21, 2008
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    That is sweet and sad at the same time i love it!!


  • EmmaLuLu
    April 6, 2008

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    awww...wow!*tear* this si wonderfully written! check mine out too


  • Ms. Nellie Bell
    April 2, 2008
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    That was beuatiful i hope one day you'll feel like your your free of the misery of the world


  • Angelflower
    April 2, 2008

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    This was a beautifully sad write.. The emotion in this piece was so strong... You know I have said and wrote this too (along the lines of this) and people always tell me, "it is better to have loved and lost then to have never loved at all."
    Now I'm sure that I believe that at all.. The memory of a lost love is like stabbing the knife back into your chest..
    But anyway this was a very strong piece.. I enjoyed reading it..
    Peace to you, Jetleena

  • gothvamp4292
    March 22, 2008
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    wow thats so sweet and so sad it makes me want to cry lol im such a baby


  • eleno
    March 22, 2008

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    hmm, i reread it.. hm.. are you over? am lost.sorry,, none of my businesss


    • NickN
      March 22, 2008
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      I wish that I could say I was over her... I'm trying to be, but it's like trying to tear my heart out of my chest and continue living.....


  • eleno
    March 22, 2008
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    this is sad, and i am sorry, but it sounds like this girl is in the past? am i right? hmm, i dont know, i just semse that because it looks like you are over something here. hmm. anyway good poem here. take care. -eleno


  • Bleeding-Black-Roses
    March 21, 2008
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    this very sad poem but i do love it very much
    nice pic!

  • Retardx
    March 20, 2008
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    i think your awsome


  • fallingsky
    March 18, 2008

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    I really like this poem nick. Is this the girl who you are with right now? If so she is so incredibly lucky to have you. There aren't many times in a persons life when you can love someone as you love this person. Good job!


    • NickN
      March 18, 2008
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      Sadly, no, this is not the girl that I'm in a relationship with. The girl this poem was written on merely destroyed my belief in the reality of love...


  • Til the Day I Die
    March 13, 2008
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    aww.. your no monster i can tell that much...your really good at poetry....I loved it..


  • Kiran silver member
    March 12, 2008

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    This is extremely emotive and heartrending. Sometimes we feel that we need to let go of the person most important to us, who we love the most, but if you let her go, you may find that her path will lead straight back to you.
    This is a deeply moving piece.


  • TrixieOne
    March 8, 2008
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    This piece is wonderful. You must really love her to let her go.

    Yeah, life sucks


  • Sf
    January 31, 2008

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    This is really emotive but shouldn't you let your partner (or ex) decide? Maybe she feels differently.

  • wendymolly
    January 24, 2008
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    a subtle twistiness to this that never overcomes the rest of the message, Supurbly creatived.


  • tawk gold member
    January 22, 2008

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    Great poem so full of raw emotion and sadness. I could feel your pain. Don't give up on life try to hang in there. I know from experience that things can get better overnight when you least expect it


  • beautifull-ugly228
    January 21, 2008
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    rad

    wow
    ur an amazing
    poet this
    was a beautiful write!!!'
    keep it up:]]


  • xxteardropsofjoyxx
    January 21, 2008
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    thats very sad I have the same feeling of the guy im with but I dont want him mad cause I am going to move to Massachuettes.


  • PerfectImperfection
    January 19, 2008

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    This is such a very sad piece. So often we lose track of our own light, wading within shadows to console. Sometimes I think the damage remains, no matter how far we push the dreams away. Great write!


  • Lady Altheia
    August 29, 2007

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    Hoodwinked

    I fail to see someone who writes beautiful poetry to be a monster. We are harder on ourselves than anyone else.


  • tawk gold member
    August 24, 2007
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    Hood-Winked!

    You are not a monster, you are a person who cares and loves others. What an amazing write so full of raw emotion and wonderful imagery. Keep up the great writing

    You have just been Hood-Winked courtesy of the Poetic Bandits


  • theforgotten one
    August 19, 2007

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    how sad

    I can feel the sadness,sometimes to save the ones that we love from pain we have to make a personell sacrafice as well. this write conveys that sacrafice.


  • DareU2Byourself
    May 18, 2007

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    Holy shit!!! (Oh, does cursing offend you?) What you wrote in your author notes is a poem in itself!! It's like I just read two incredibly heart-wrenching writes!! They're awesome. I can't keep giving you applauses, though, 'cause I need my points. I'll give you more some other time


    • NickN
      May 18, 2007
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      Hahaha, no worries, cursing doesn't offend me. I use it in some of my poems actually. Glad you enjoyed "both" poems.

      -Nick


  • Lj-
    April 30, 2007
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    So sweet.
    I love it.

  • Sekhmet666
    April 9, 2007
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    Awe this is so pretty.


  • Hopelessly Hopeful
    April 9, 2007

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    This is why I am still single. when I look in the mirror I see a cold black hearted bitch. I'm sorry that you had to let her go. but you can't automatically assume that everyone will be better off when you are gone. you can't help who you love even if it hurts. it was really sad if i wasn't so cold I would have cried.


  • Never Fall in Love
    April 8, 2007

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    I remember every moment
    Shared in loving bliss
    And those memories will fade,
    Only to be missed.

    I'll probably sound like some huge hypocrite here,
    But I can't care
    You're gonna have to realize that
    No matter what road you take
    You're going to hurt someone
    it isnt something you can avoid
    and as they say
    " you hurt the ones you love the most"
    or some shit like that
    look at yourself, not your reflection
    Cuz I see someone so sweet
    I wish I was there to give u a big hug
    But you're not a monster.. k?
    Lets put it this way, if you were a monster
    God knows I'll be hiding under my bed now

    tale care
    your write was awesome, by the way

    NeveR ♥


  • Gremmlin
    April 5, 2007

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    this piece made me cry ... your a great writer nick. keep going never put your chin down ... days pass and it might get worse but it will all come out ok. =]

    kayla


  • Takunaki
    April 5, 2007

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    Wow. This is remarkable. Simple yet so full of emotion. I really enjoyed this piece. Grand job Nick . Very personal and expressive.


  • Lil-Soulful
    April 5, 2007

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    I like this a whole whole lot because I can really relate to this one right now. It's hard but it's for the best the majority of the tim


  • Kevo MF Last
    April 5, 2007

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    I liked this one alot. I have smells like teen spirit playing in the background, and i think that added alot to it, not that the poem actually needed anything added to it, it was just some extra angst thrown in for good measure. amazing write. im curious to know what law you broke though.


  • Snowflake11
    April 5, 2007

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    this is so heart-wrenching. So sad. Don't give up is all I have to tell you. Writing sometimes helps us through our emotional times. It has helped me on many occasions. Things always have the ability to get better though. It's amazing what we can get through if we put our mind to it.

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