Wilting roses upon the vine
Bleeding hearts, they feel fine,
Crying eyes behind the glass
Fear that builds on the past
Behind the make up, an ugly face
She's held up in a unfair place
The room is filling up with tears
She's crying out from lonly fears
Hug your sorrows away
Finding proper words to say
Children cry in chilled grace
Hide the cuts with pretty lace
Love words pass through your head
Keep you asleep in side your bed
Smiling faces keep you calm
Cry no more tears into your palm
Author notes
wise-child12, Cryin' is the best Areosmith song i ever heard!
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This is so lovely and beautiful. I love how you organivzed all of your thoughts so well. I really like how you told your story in first person and you had a very smooth rhyme to it.
Keep Writing
~~Meri~ -
Very interesting poem this is. I find my favourite part was:
Behind the make up, an ugly face
She's held up in a unfair place
The room is filling up with tears
She's crying out from lonly fears
Overall though you did a grand ol' job with this one. I really like the rhymes... they're quite original!
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