Dripping down the walls
Into tiny molds.
Solidifying to make thousands of multi-faced things
All of them useless,
Yet intensly desirable.
*Like flaming kings, with swords covered in flowers
-thorns, petals, leaves-.
Belted with courage that
Breaks down front lines*
or
*Crushed Berries, seeping out the last
of their internal fluids
onto a clean sheet of paper*
or
*the old girls, spent and washed out
Bringing life to their monochrome souls
with a new scarf*
Author notes
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A contest entry
- *~-* The Passion of Red *-~* by Dragonsblood.
450 points, ended April 18, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Sweet...
tatsing write. i enjoyed this. even though i would rarely read a piece like this its just strange that this piece sorta was defying and sweet. -
This is nothing short of a complete and very all too real miracle of thoughts and imagery and expressions of mood and feelings that go well beyond the ordinary and beyond!
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WELL..............
I'd say you for sure got into the passion of red. Very nicely done.I wish you much luck in the contest. Sounds like a winner to me!!!!!!!!!!!!
POETDONTKNOWIT -
unimaginable imagery
I would never of thought to connect mashed berries to a scarf and to these multifaced things that are useless and desired... I dont know what they are! lol what is it? Vases? Pots? A painting? down walls into tiny molds... whats the story behind this poem? are they random events or are they more? who are the flaming kings? I love that stanza the best it is so full of power and authority but why ruin it with scarves and berries? Very mixed and messy but so vibrant and full of imagery! I wonder if a poem each can come off of each stanza in this alone? -
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well you asked me to write about the color! this is exactly what came to my mind first. The color evokes so many images that leap and bound in my mind.
Im glad you thought the way you did about the poem, because your comment says exactly what i was trying to say about the color....
'very mixed and messy but so vibrant and full of images.'
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i LOVE that last stanza!
"the old girls, spent and washed out
Bringing life to their monochrome souls
with a new scarf"
it has some of the most amazing imagery ever! awesome write!
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