Every time I squint on fields,
I'm advised, bugs perhaps shoot forth
With the winds of chill winding down,
Every time I squint on fields,
Species of hoppers burst from dirt
Piano insect legs climb soon
Every time I squint on fields,
I'm advised, bugs perhaps shoot forth
Author notes
i used the type of triolet where each line has 8 syllables within.
a 10 year old i am...
my username is SplishSplashPencil
I chose option #5 for blablablooey12's contest.
In a list
A contest entry
- 14 and Under: Form Poetry by Max Ritvo.
375 points, ended April 21, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Choices! Fun! For only kids under 13 by blablablooey12.
500 points, ended April 15, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Form Poetry! by Kiran.
1050 points, ended October 29, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Hello?!
Comments
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What a great triolet! An amazing and very unique subject matter!
Thanks for entering my contest and all the best to you!
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Smiles
I appreciate your impression... Your brain was evidentially extraordinary enough this time to want to read a different topic lol!
I'm grateful that you hosted this contest, it was fun and exciting,
SplishSplashPencil
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hello dear.....
i love this title to your work and i like the flow of your journey threw the vision you took threw my eyes. i cant lie and say it wasnt strange to me cause it was but i loved every strange word i read. hugs
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A very pretty triolet. Your word choice is springy and a bit bizarre which I think suits the insect-jumpery of the imagery very well. I'm quite impressed!
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A burst of difference
Max (not an ax of words used!),
I could not believe... when I saw my new notes, each part of it got stronger and stronger. That silver isn't just a trophy to me, but an accomplishment made.
An event to clap for,
Daisy
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Cute
A cute and interesting little poem Splish
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