No one knows the real me
No one understands me
I'm not really the happy girl
That you see laughing and smiling.
Those laughs and smiles
they are f/a/k/e
The happiness that I show
is only on the o.u.t.s.i.d.e.
I'm just a missunderstood girl
going through severe
Depression
I always feel a l o n e.
I keep these things hidden
within my body and mind
I keep all my dark secrets
deep inside me.
I can't let anything show
Can't let the sadness or pain show
I always feel like a burden
to everyone around me.
My heart is broken
and my ego shattered
But I still can't let
anybody know the REAL me.
Author notes
Option 1.
Words used:
Within
Secret(s)
Depression
Broken
Shattered
Alone
Missunderstood
Burden
-I know that this prolly sucks really bad. I tried. Its the best I can do. I've been in writters block and yeah. Sweet contest hun. I hope you at least like this.
A contest entry
- Who Are You?! A Dark Contest All About Poets!!!!!(Come in and take a look you WILL not be sorry!!!) by XXBrunettexBarbieXX.
450 points, ended April 18, 2007, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this was alright. could have been more powerful, maybe have a few stronger words. it was good but not like "hell yea, kickass" (which i'm sure you'd prefer) i can totally relate to this.
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aww hun no worries i really like this poem alot..it reminds me alot of me and i really do understand how you feel in this poem..it hit very close to home for me and i can really relate to this poem..your words were very powerful,emotional and strong..you are a great writter and i enjoyed reading this very much keep writting your very talented, thank you for entering my contest and good luck
~Chrissy~ -
I thin its written very well, utilizing the challenges and coming out with a great write!
~Katie -
this was another great write and i can really relate to this poem..it is a very lonely feeling and this poem really reminded me of me..im here if you need to talk keep writitng your talented and good luck in the contest
XTashaX -
So....This is weriod but u know that I know u lol and u can talk to me any time about anything unless its about a guy i like jk I love ya your my best friend forever:
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