Clouds a darkened, slated gray
Carrying their sunless burdens
Through the foggy laden lands
The green blades of grass
Lofty, shadowing trees
Are dark mirrors of the turbulent skies
As the rain starts to surrender to the storm
Each drop plunging the ground into a drenching haze
Sheets of tears from the sky's agony
Every violent trickle shedding it's bullets to the earth
I peer into my insignificant soul
It is drowning in its passionate remorse
It falls to it's mournful face
Hope buckling and dispair prevailing
My soul's battle wages forth in conflict
Suddenly screaming out to be saved
From the wretched darkness taking over
Thunder explodes in my soul's deep desolate place
Lightning piercing the most painful wounds
Hear my little voice, Oh gentle Savior
Listen to my crying, repenting soul
Suddenly the clouds break forth!
A bright beam of glorious light!
Invades and all shadows cease to exist
My soul basks in the brilliant rays of forgiveness
Lighting the wet from my tears
Like gifts of promise of being cleansed
The storm abated, the painful tears of rain
Replaced with a sunrise of redeeming joy!
My soul is no longer alone
My God, You fill this tiny place
Changing me with Your eternal radiance
Filling me with Your infinitely loving space
You become my Soul
Author notes
This poem is about my soul as it seeks God. In its journey of repentance and joy in discovering pardon and incomprehensible love!
Option 2
A contest entry
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what a sight
wow, i can picture the journey one would have to take for everything in life.
in the line Filling me with Your infinetly loving space did you mean infinitely?
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You use great imagery and capitalise on the audiences senses well. Good luck in the contest
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Now i need you to be a good contestant and put your option no. in the author's box before i judge. I don't want to have to DQ
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this is a really good poem. I'm glad that you chose option two (am i right?). Not many people chose that. I wasn't allowing prewrites for that option, but i wasn't very clear, so I'll excuse you.
I like the way you have combined God and a storm in one poem. I like your description of the storm, especially
'Clouds a darkened, slated gray
Carrying their sunless burdens
Through the foggy laden lands
The green blades of grass
Lofty, shadowing trees'.
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Beautifully written! Your faith and devotion are so evident in this inspirational piece. Spiritual and defining. Lovely work! Thanks for your entry!
~Lori
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