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Tears from Heaven

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Tears from Heaven


O God hear an angels' prayer
If only man would learn to love
Forgive the sight of blinded men
The angels' prayer from far above

Banished from the eyes of God
The tears fall on the clouds again
The angels' prayer from far above
Forgive the sight of blinded men

The teardrops fall upon a cloud
O God hear this prayer thereof
Forgive the sight of blinded men
The angels' prayer from far above

Weep until our prayer is answered
God please hear this prayer; amen
The angels' prayer from far above
Forgive the sight of blinded men

 

 

 

 

 

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Mirrored Refrain
The Mirrored Refrain is a rhyming verse form constructed by Stephanie Repnyek.

The poem is formed by three or more quatrains where two lines within the quatrain
are the "mirrored refrain" or alternating refrain.

The rhyme scheme is as follows: xaBA, xbAB, xaBA, xbAB, etc..

x represents the only lines that do not rhyme within the poem. A and B represent
the refrain. The first four stanzas of the example poem are labeled for better
understanding.

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    June 29

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    So glad I dropped in on this mirrored refrain..I am enlightened not only by the form, but the touching message...How inspirational and heartfelt a cry here...Keep penning, my lovely...a


  • Pisces Pieces
    September 26, 2007

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    This is very beautifully done,
    with a beautiful message, and plea.

    I don't know if I could pull of this form, especially as you have. The repitition is so subtle and fitting and compliments the message within the poem. It's amazing.

    ♥


  • Death of the Author
    May 19, 2007
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    Has this been removed from my contest...if so I don't know why, it was very good!


  • Swan song gold member
    May 13, 2007

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    This one would be hard to put together. The meter is so smmoth that you don't nitce the rhyme as much. Th The chants. It could be a song.

  • Death of the Author
    April 29, 2007

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    Wow a beautiful poem in a very eye catching style, thank you for entering my contest, you are making it very hard to judge and it has been open less than an hour! Take care and good luck x


  • pattyann4500
    April 5, 2007

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    How truly lovely this prayer. I enjoy the beautiful flow of your chosen forms. Although I don't understand the forms, I do love when the piece sounds so perfect. I'll certainly be reading more. Hugs, Patricia


  • Nature Song silver member
    April 5, 2007

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    Inpsiring poem, lovely in content and form. Amera I love the author's notes you always leave. Angel's hear our prayer. The background and picture go so well with the poem. Touching as only your hand can write, so easily it reads. ~Sie


  • Twilight4Eternity
    April 4, 2007

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    very nice and interesting form. Sounds kind of complicated actually. Thanks for the entry and good luck in the contest!


    • Amera gold member
      April 5, 2007
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      What kind of comment is that? A Mirrored Refrain is too complicated! Your instructions did not say it is contest for morons. I’ll with draw and stop wasting your time.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    April 4, 2007

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    This is a very pretty and delicate write that expresses so much truth. It has a very gentle flow to it and the near-rhymes actually enhance this piece. Glad I popped by on the off-chance Thanks for sharing this great piece of wisdom, wish you well. Laura


  • PerVirtuous
    April 4, 2007

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    The poem is wonderful. Brilliant construction, deep meaning, nice flow, everything that a poem is supposed to be. Three bunnies for this.


  • Desire gold member
    April 4, 2007

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    Beautiful-

    What a piece You have penned my Friend and love the form You have used!
    Powerful presentation and images
    Love this verse!!

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Spiritvision angel
    April 4, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this write very much. Its a beautiful reminder that we all have the ability of prayer. thank you so much


  • Lucky 2006
    April 4, 2007

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    Ausome

    I think that it is cool that you wrote a poem about God I love they way that your lines flow and I just like this poem over all it has made me think about some things .... Keep on writing and reading I hope that you read some of my poems....


  • JohnnyD gold member
    April 4, 2007

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    Forgive the sight of blinded men

    God Amera do you realize how true that is of men? How they can be blinded for most of their life and then one thing can awaken them? I had that happen to me very recently and I am still deep in thought on it.
    But, very nice write here dear, very nice, really touched my heart today especially.



    Dad


  • mysticstorm gold member
    April 4, 2007

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    Beautiful form and truth. If only we could learn to truly love the way we were intended to and not always damage each other, what a wonderful world it would be.
    Sadness weeps from your words, yet it holds such hope of peace and harmony.
    Lovely work!

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