Take me to my fantasy
A place you’ll only know
A world where life is simple
A place we used to grow
Somewhere worth exploring
Somewhere lush and green
Sun kissed bodies drenched in thirst
I need someone to believe
Take me to my fantasy
My life is so obscene
A world full of pity
A world full of dreams
Lets just go and leave
We don’t need a car
We don’t need any money
There’s no ticket
There’s no plane
Close your eyes and drift away
Fly with me to that place
To my fantasy
To my heart
Take me to that special place
A place we only know
Author notes
My heart song: Somewhere only we know by keane
In a list
A contest entry
- Your Favorite Song... by poet2angels.
475 points, ended April 14, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Are You A Great Lord? by The Cube.
500 points, ended May 4, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - L-o-v-e thats all i want by even angelz cry.
300 points, ended June 12, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What is your fantasy? by Sinfully Yours.
1000 points, ended July 11, 2007, 14 entries
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517 points, ended November 22, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP Book Contest: Get Published! (Last Chance!) by tinuelena.
1200 points, ended December 12, 2007, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Exquisite in its simplicity and profound message. Great job!!
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Well done, love.
Write on. One.
Take me to my fantasy
My life is so obscene
A world full of pity
A world full of dreams
Lets just go and leave
Nice...
Dez
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Congrats for winning two trophies for this
this is amazing...inspired or not lol..this seems brand new lol...good poem..lol flinging good!
Take me to my fantasy
My life is so obscene
this part the feeling is very deep and intensified!
VERY GOOD!
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"Close your eyes and drift away
Fly with me to that place
To my fantasy
To my heart
Take me to that special place
A place we only know"
great entry fantastic flow and metter love the end i know im a soppy romantic ^^
this deserves a trophy
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Very good. I think this is the best one you've written. I love:
"Somewhere worth exploring
Somewhere lush and green
Sun kissed bodies drenched in thirst
I need someone to believe"
Gets the message and uses basic and staright forward imagery and rhyme. I just can't stop reading it.
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Thank you so much....this was based on my favorite love song....I think this is the best one I ever wrote too...
B
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Incredible ... you just amaze me in every write ...
Close your eyes and drift away
Fly with me to that place
To my fantasy
To my heart
Take me to that special place
A place we only know
This is amazing ... "close your eyes and drift away ... fly with me to that place" don't we all wish we could do that? I know I do ... that fantasy world that awaits us ... and that fantasy world we never want to leave ... very well written and very beautiful
much luv and respect
sparkeh -
Congratulations
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Thank you so much
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hello
i could really feel it
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Heartfelt...
I really wish you submitted this poem into my first contest...I really like it.
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AwW thanks. I think I wrote it at the same time too
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Thought at first this was going to be a rhyming poem, you kind of switched after that first verse. Liked the ending though - that special place that only you two know.
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This is lovely.
However did you write the word no in this verse for effect?
We don’t need no car
We don’t need no money
There’s no ticket
There’s no plane
I personally feel it would be better with
We don’t need a car
We don’t need any money
There’s no ticket
There’s no plane
It just sounds better from a gramatical point of few.
Hugs
Jan
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Thank you so much. My grammer can be a little off. Thank you so much for pointing that out.
~Bloved~
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Interesting piece to be certain, nice flow to it for the most part. The double negatives do throw it off in this piece, making a jarring note in the flow, but easily repaired if you so choose. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e
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Thank you so much for pointing out my mistake. It is most apericate. Thanks again
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Just Such Beautiful Words.....
I read you profile and i am even honored to say i read this beautiful piece and you gave me a good story.
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thanks so much!!!!!!!!
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Awesome
I liked this a lot~ I love the rhythum of the read of it... It's like you made your own song! I was ready to go too!!! Great job!
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thanks! its inspired by my fav song Somewhere only we know by Keane! I love them so much!
Thanks!
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Great poem. Very fantasy like. Haha, pun intended...anywho, great job and thanks for entering.
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thanks!
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Hey, this was great! Beautiful at that! Makes me want to go to this place with you! ahahaaa.. Well I loved the last stanza because it was the ending to a great piece.
Close your eyes and drift away
Fly with me to that place
To my fantasy
To my heart
Take me to that special place
A place we only know
Thanx for sharing and please keep up the good work!
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awwwww thanks so much!
**Bloved**
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this is really good. i really like it.
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are we all not like that? it gives a feel that we wanted to be in a better place than what we are alread in. this also reminds me of a poem i made long time ago
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this is great i love it. my favorite part was
Take me to my fantasy
My life is so obscene
A world full of pity
A world full of dreams
Lets just go and leave
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love it
I love that song by Keane and your poem had the same feel. I just wrote a poem the other day with that title...That song always makes me feel like running off to a tranquil place and your poem did the same..Great job!
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This is a great poem. I don't think I heard that song but it sounds like a great song. well written poem dear poet and good luck in the contest
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