In the depth of my
mind rages a beast of
human destruction.
The blood memories of a
starved heart, rejection
of all.
Blood splatters, the sweet smell of
crimson blood.
The red glow excites me to the point
of slicing a corpes open just to smell
a rot of organs.
It licks it's blood covered hands.
This is the beast that lives deep
with the depths of my hell based
mind.
In a list
A contest entry
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Wow...amazing write. Very vivid and powerful. The imagery is tantilizing. The poem has a real pulse and throttle. It is so lovely and vivid. The poem made me feel like I was listening to a heavy metal song; very alive and awake-aware. It really presents a clear, dark image that seems to breathe as a living thing. Nicely done!
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Intense
To me I felt tense and nervous I didn't know what was to come... Suggestion *** fix the word "The red gow" Think it should be glow... otherwise it was heart pounding good. -
Very graphic.
lol
But very imaginative poem.
Creative mind that you have...
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ok, last time i said yuck i offended the writer. yuck is not always bad. it means you have good imagery. so yuck!!! i would like to wish you the best of luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. I am not really a very big fan of dark poetry. i just don'e understand it. I try not to condemn, but i just don't enjoy reading it. The actual structure and writing technique of this poem is very good and you definitely have a talent.
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Although it is short it is wonderful.
I liked the part:
"It licks it's blood covered hands.
This is the beast that lives deep
with the depths of my hell based
mind."
Muchos Love and Luck
~Jess -
thanx for entering my contest not what i'm reallllyyy lookking for thanx for entering
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wow
defintitly dark i have to say,it was not to short or to long.i like the line Blood splatters, the sweet smell of
crimson blood.that was a realy nice line i think i can see the blood.thank you for entering my contest.
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