She remained silent as
her world collasped.
even the birds
refused to sing while
witnessing her inner death,
she swore never again.
and
There was hope rising
deep within her soul.
for she left that pain,
remained rooted
toes curled in the dirt
waiting
with her breaths so deep,
they almost choked her.
yet, she remained firm
in her mission to leave
the abuse seeking life.
© Debby Sorensen Carlson
4/03/2007
Author notes
This is deeply personal..My name is Debby Carlson
A contest entry
- There IS Life After The Abuse {Contest} by Viyanna Rosemarie.
800 points, ended May 1, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is very emotional and very well written. I am glad to hear that you have healed and gone on with a wonderful life for yourself. We all deserve peace. Patty
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he remained silent as
her world collasped.
even the birds
refused to sing while
witnessing her inner death,
she swore never again.
This pargraph made me feel so very sad. You have capture what many woman go though and feel every day. One day I promise to leave. For some reason stay. You have capture many feelings in your words. It made me feel sad she reamined and wonder what happen to her. Very well wrote -
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Earthstar
Thank you. HOnestly, to stay in a relationship like this would be suicide. I left and I wrote this so that other women will see in my words what this does to them and the need to break free to live. God bless..d
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AWESOME !
From one who has been there one too many times, I can relate totally to this one. You have done a great job with this one and I wish you all the very best in this contest.
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Julie
Thank you Julie.. It is not easy to walk away.. but it can be done. I hope you are well and free now. God bless. Debby
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Intense and powerful
Beautifully done - very sensitive approach to a heart renching topic. Only in His goodness, can we heal from such terror and pain.
We do have a choice to seek life or become dead. It takes great courage to seek life.
I love you. - jo
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Jo
Thank you so much Jo.. hugs and much love. Debby
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Good
Very uplifting write. Congragulations on being determained to leave the abuse, just make sure that leaving it doesnt have you put up a wall to block out everyone even good. I made that mistake for a while. I wish you the best of luck in the contest along with any other thing in your life.
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kate
kate.. thank you ! I stayed to myself for awhile after I left. I used this time to find me and heal and God stayed right there with me. I am whole because of Christ.. there really is no other explanation. I am at peace with my life and I am so thankful. may God bless you always. Hugs and love,, debby
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a very hearthelt poem , i remenber how i felt when the abuse happen to me , i didnot think i could go but then the sregth came from somewhere, a poem i can relate too
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I understood that if I did not leave, I would die.. and God took my hand, gave me the strength to walk out that door without looking back. Now, My life is peaceful and happy..
I wish that for you too. Thank you for reading my piece and your comment. God bless. Debby
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I agree that this piece is very personal but you showed so much strength through the words that are written here. My friend I am glad that I have the opportunity to read this beautiful piece and wish you godspeed on your challenge... Stay blessed...
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darryl
Darryl, Thank you very much. This was past and I am much better. My strength is God. There is no way I could have made it otherwise. God bless you. Debby
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Debby,
This is amazing...You have painted a dark yet beautiful word picture. I feel pain at what must be the reality behind this piece. You are obviously sharing real pain here with honest bravery. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. ..::WW::..
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WW
Thank you ! It was the reality ..was being the key word. It has been a journey and I am fine now.. just wanted others to know there is a way to freedom. Blesssings. Debby
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Stunning
Ahh debbie, I knew there was a reasong that I put you on my favorites. This was very personal yes, but also wonderful. I felt the longing for escape. Thank you soo much for posting this one!
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True
Thank you so much ! How very nice of you to say.. I did escape.. Praise God. Hugs.. d
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can you please add your name per the contest page. if there is a reason you do not feel it is ok to do so please im me and we will discuss this. viyanna rosemarie
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It's added. Thankyou.. Blessings. Debby
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